| "Rumors" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Title: Yeah...
Reviewed By: Seikyo On: October 27, 2004 16:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
>.> I agree with them. The grammar is awful, the plot is extremely common (perhaps not in the FF8 area however), and the chapters are very short. ^^;;
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Title: WOW!
Reviewed By: jen_luvs_fluffy [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2004 12:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a pretty good fanfic...it is my first final fantasy one....i found it a bit weird that Irving thought that Selphie cheated on him because he would be more the type to cheat lol....but i luv Irving because he is hott lol.... please update soon sine it has been a long time
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Title: Review
Reviewed By: Jonah On: March 13, 2004 19:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your style of writing was accetable, except that it looks like you copied it right out of an online roleplaying chat. Your spelling and grammer needs to improve considerably. You see how I am typing here? "u" isn't a word. "You" is how it should be written, if you are actually writing a story. It was a very original plot, however. I have never read any fanfic with a plot like this (And that isn't including only FF8.). I enjoyed it, but some of the sentences were run-ons and confusing. Overall, it could be improved, but it was acceptable. If you need me to explain anything to you, just IM me.
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Reviewed By: fizzypop On: December 13, 2003 16:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dis is so so gud plz carry on writin
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Reviewed By: TurkFox [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2003 11:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
This may be quite a low rating, but I have reasons. Mainly, I agree with what tuatha danaan said above. You need to work on things like saying 'u' all time, and the *cries* thing. And also adding some more description.
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Reviewed By: Quisty1506 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2003 02:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW great so far...poor selphie. i guess irvy feels like an idiot now ne? well he should dammit!!..oh yea anyway well update ASAP i cant wait for the next chapter. *think about how she abandoned her Forgive Me? fan fic* OH JEEZ I BETTER GET UPDATING!!! *runs off*
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Reviewed By: tuatha danaan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2003 05:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please don't be upset by receiving a low rating from me for your fic, there are a lot of areas that could be improved considerably, and to rate any of those areas higher would be misleading. You can do a lot more.
Stylistically there is a real problem with emotions being indicated within asterisks, like *cries*. This is not grammatically correct for a start. It may be suitable for a forum post or email, it is not a good choice for narrative.
When you write a story with dialogue the dialogue should be separated from the narrative as if it was a paragraph in it's own right. When another person speaks that dialogue should also be treated as a separate paragraph.
Your spelling seemed pretty good, but the first two problems really need to be addressed.
We are presented with a scene where Irvine is battling a t-rexaur, it would have been more enjoyable if you had described the battle. You could also have described where the people Irvine overheard were, there is very little information provided to give setting and ground the story in the scene.
Irvine and Selphie's dialogue is bare, there is no description of their reactions, and the dialogue could have been more inspiring. Try to think about using narrative to give detail, setting and scene, character description and interactions, and use dialogue to punctuate or emphasise action. It can be a lot better when used in this way.
Overall you have a good idea, you obviously intend to follow up with a plot, and further chapters. Try to fix the formatting with the dialogue and consider adding more description and I'm sure this fic will be much better.
Good luck. |
Reviewed By: Quisty1506 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2003 01:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWWW so sad poor selphie. its very good so far.keep up the good work and update ASAP k? |
Reviewed By: CleokiChan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2003 01:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awww poor selphie..thats good.Conti on with more! |
