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| "The Last Mission" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Kurai Hizoku [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2003 07:42 CDT
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Yeah, it was indeed perhaps a bit too short, but I myself don't like those long going-on poems. But I'll try to work on the rythm (don't expect any rhyme though, I suck at letting things rhyme, making things only worse).
Anyway, this was already based on a fanfic of my friend, so if you really want to know what's going on, you'd better take a look there. Name's Sardius, though I don't know if she still has that fic.[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: Entity On: July 02, 2003 16:57 CDT
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I'd have to agree with Lily on the point that it was really too short to get into it, and it didn't explain anything at all. However, as far as poems go, it was pretty good. You could have made it better by adding a little bit of rhyme, maybe a verse with a set beat, basically any kind of poetic "whatever you call those things." Hope you catch my drift....Anyway, *tear* Yohji (is it him? i thought it was) dying.... Sad, sad.[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: Lily On: June 21, 2003 15:28 CDT
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that was really short and had no point. i didn't feel any sympathy for the characters because it was such a shallow poem. It sucked.[ Request Review Removal ] |
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