Reviewed By: beingidealgrace [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2003 19:09 CDT
Comment/Review:
I think you're off to a pretty good start but there are a few things to work on. First, I don't want you to take this the wrong way, I'm just trying to help. Okay, you should work on your capitalization. Second, when you are writing dialogue for another character, start a new paragraph. And, lastly, spacing but other than those few grammtical corrections your story sounds good, so far. You should keep working on it! |
