| "A short Hentai" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: Laurilei On: March 28, 2005 14:14 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
you need to watch your spelling and grammar. Also itw as lacking in detail and felt a bit empty
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Reviewed By: A Reader On: June 27, 2003 19:10 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
A good start, but there was not much build up of the scene, not much description, not much of anything.
You might want to look at the other Kensuke PWPs written and try to see how they manage to draw the reader in enough to enjoy the story. |
Reviewed By: Ken_Ichijouji, to lazy to log in On: June 26, 2003 10:12 CDT
Comment/Review:
Short but cute. I only have one comment. It is Daisuke not Diasuke. Maybe a little spelling mistake. Further I liked it. Kensuke is just so god damn cute!!!!! |
