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| "miss you" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: AnimeMazokuProductions [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2003 00:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pretty good fic so far, but it could definatly use some beta-reading. and spell check. ummm, you rated it NC-17, i don't understand why, are you planning on addig extra chapters? it is a good idea and could do with some expanding and definatly a prologe and make it into a good fic. It has potential but needs work, if you do write more, i'd like to see it. ^_^ Very sad. | Reviewed By: Lothlorien [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2003 17:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
The idea is interesting, but the fic is very cluttered, being all in just one paragraph (thought that is probably not your fault), so if you could change that it would be much better. And you should get it beta read so that the grammar mistakes are eliminated and the fic is more...flowing. Other than that, keep writing, it gets better and easier ^_^ |
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