| "Justice for Heero" Reviews/Comments [ 17 ] |
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Title: To all readers of this fic.
Reviewed By: Vega-Lume On: March 08, 2004 13:35 CST
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Hullo! my name is Vega-Lume and I used to be Duo no Baka. I may of may not post any more of this fic here. I am currently posting a new updated verson of this fic at this address: http://adultfan.nexcess.net/aff/authors.php?no=7097 also if you would like updates of my new works; feel free to join this group: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/GW_writers/ thank you again for all of your reviews! please let me know if you want me to keep posting this fic here,only if enough of you say yes, will I post the updated version. Lotsa Love Vega-Lume
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Reviewed By: Princess2000204 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 08, 2004 00:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like the idea and bases of your story but your Grammer sucks, you have a lot of spelling errors in it and the story would also sound better if you added more detail. Adding detail to like what's going on around the characters, what the characters look like. A lot of FanFic writers, no a lot of WRITERS get beta-readers for their fics, even one-shot fics maybe you guys/girls would look into getting one. I really like your work, I just think if you made it better it could be AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: no-one special On: March 06, 2004 21:19 CST
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Okay yeah this is a good story but... 1) Wufei's real name is Chang Wufei not Wufei Chang. 2) I thought this was ur story not someone else's if u want to post stories then go do so but it's ur story not theirs, u have to write it not them. If u don't like what i'm saying then that's okay but I, being a writter also get writters block but I make it through , I don't ask others to write a chapter for me, I ask for idea's then combian it into my own, see where I'm getting at now... ne ways if u don't then I guess I can't say much more. Sorry if u think this is rude but this is a review after all, not just something that tells u to write more and stuff like that.
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Reviewed By: PATTY 40 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2003 20:03 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't think your doing this wight !!!It should not be one long chapter... and where is todays chapter for 8/1/03 I can't find it ? I like the story but it hard to read like this ...Can you please fixit in to sepret chapters |
Reviewed By: PreventerPixie [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2003 17:52 CDT
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please update soon...i can't wait for the next part!
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Reviewed By: his infernal majesty On: July 30, 2003 16:34 CDT
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dude most awesome
cant wait to see what goes on in the next chapters and if duo finds heeros dad and and and well all those great questions i'm now left with
-sniffles- |
Reviewed By: PATTY 40 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2003 20:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
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I Know, I don't have to review each chapter... But I like to encourage you to continue and to let you know your doing a great job and that I love this story... |
Reviewed By: Yume Maxwell-Yuy [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2003 04:19 CDT
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ooh...this is sounding very good so far....is it going to be 2X1??? I hope so.....
PLease keep up the good work and update again really soon....I really want to see what happens next......Duo and Heero foreva....JA~! |
Reviewed By: Talon Sage [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2003 21:06 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
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My biggest problem with this fic is it's rather difficult to read. I'd suggest getting a beta reader to help with the grammar and puncuation. However it is a good story that shows a lot of potential, and I did enjoy what I read. It's an interesting premise, and I look forward to more, but the effect of your writing could be greatly assisted by a beta reader.
Keep it up, ne? |
Reviewed By: madamebutterfly1983 On: July 25, 2003 19:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awesome story |
Reviewed By: MookieNH [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2003 18:28 CDT
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The first of this sort of AU that I've read. I wonder if Heero's ability to lip read, as evidenced in the original series, will come into play at some point. (No, you don't have to answer yea or nay, I'm just musing "aloud")
It has promise, and I look forward to seeing where you will go with this! |
Reviewed By: PATTY 40 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2003 18:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
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I Know, I don't have to review each chapter...But I will, and I would like to encourage you to continue and to let you know your doing a great job and that I love this story... |
Reviewed By: Glaring Dream On: July 23, 2003 21:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Hey, Heero is sooo sweet...want more...please keep writing! |
Reviewed By: Dee On: July 23, 2003 21:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Just Loved it...please continue... |
Reviewed By: Cat On: July 23, 2003 19:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Heero. i don't know what to say, but its great keep going. i want to see Heero become happy. If heeros 17 Duos 20 how old are everyone else? Please have Trowa and Quatra at least make an appearance. |
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