| "Broken" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: PrincessCrakALakin [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2005 18:59 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
An absolutely wonderful story! I've read up to chapter 7 on another site so I know it's good. There's only one problem though, this story hasn't updated in forever! I really hope you update it soon, I'm dieing to know what happens! Please update!
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Reviewed By: Lara On: August 23, 2003 20:28 CDT
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We need to read more! Please don't stop writing this! |
Reviewed By: Vega On: July 29, 2003 19:30 CDT
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Nice fic so far. Very interesting plot! But it's completly missing the hentai part! When we're going to read it? I hope soon. |
Reviewed By: Laina On: July 29, 2003 15:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like it alot so far, but I don't think BULMA would act like that. Also if you want to keep her saying master or anything like that , don't have her end every sentence whith it. I'm not trying to tell you how to write the story , just giving advise. ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Yari [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2003 21:02 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Pretty good! Keep the chapters coming!! |
Reviewed By: Megan On: July 28, 2003 19:43 CDT
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WOW! That sound interesting! Are we going to see more details about Bulma's new life as slave?
People usually hardly bothered with them!
As soon as Bulma's hooked up with Vegeta she usually have the freedom to do as she pleases! |
Reviewed By: Sara On: July 28, 2003 19:30 CDT
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The intro is interesting but well between when Nappa take her away to be broken and the point in which she showed up in Vegeta's room there's an huge gap.
Beside to broke her in such way you'll need or something scentific like brainwashing or a long torture cause Bulma didn't seem the type who would give up immediatly unless it's all a plan to not be tortured and finding a way to escape.
But by how you described her she should be a great actress to look so 'broken'.
As for Vegeta... if you want him to miss her fiery spirit you should have him had more taste of it... maybe wandering around her while they broke her.
For now he just saw a glimpse. He can't miss it, it's so few he could as well be not sure it was there.
And if she's broken now she can't show it.
So maybe a flashback is required...
As for the future... I'm really curious to see how this will go on and if Vegeta will be able to unbroke Bulma...
take care |
Reviewed By: Vega On: July 31, 2003 20:35 CDT
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I hope you'll continue this soon! Maybe with more details about Bulma's life! |
Reviewed By: Skayda [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2003 14:35 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am really enjoying your story! Keep up the great work on it and I look forward to the next chapter!
~Ami |
