Reviewed By: Dark Samus [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2004 15:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
Um what can I say. What's the betting it was written by a bloke. I scanned through and after the third paragraph had picked up five subtle references of a perverted nature. Although I do feel the story was good it probably could have survived without the bisexuality. Overall good but if you write another one I would drop the weird girly things and focus on the storyline a bit more. I'm not trying to crush it here, only offer some constructive criticism. You should read my story Broken Nebula and tell me what you think. No hard feelings mate.
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