Reviewed By: Tyrne J On: November 27, 2001 20:49 CST
Comment/Review:
t_j: I like the idea behind this fic, Psychocavalier (even if Heero was being an overly jealous, abusive jerk ::sniff::). The only thing I'm having trouble with is the way nearly everything is put in conversation, like how Athana is talking to herself about her dilemma, but then talking to Duo. I understood the fic, but sometimes there would be whole sections of conversations, then sections of descriptions, but they weren't mixed together -
C: Oh, come off it, you just didn't like the fact that Heero was being an overly jealous, abusive jerk. And you mentioned that, even.
Y: And don't forget, you fall into that habit, too. ::smirks::
t_j: ::pouts:: Fine, whatever. The almost constant dialogue in the fic was kind of... disconcerting...
C: ::snorts:: She liked it, Psychocavalier. She's just been in "anal-retentive reviewer" mode lately. ::glares::
t_j: ::mumbles::It's not entirely my fault for being on an MST high this past few weeks.
Y: This may also explain why she's having so much fun writing this review. MediaMiner allows COLOR! Whee!
t_j: Ehehe ^_^* Yeah.
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C: You said what you were going to say. You're done now.
t_j: ^_^;; Yeah, I guess. Well, that's it, now! Thanks for a fun read!
Y: Sorry for wasting your time with this long and nearly-pointless review. ^_^;; |
