| "Black Star High" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: Yo Mama On: January 18, 2004 18:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, I like your fic so far, I think you've got a pretty good storyline, but I think you need to put more details in and put more sentances in. It also wouldn't hurt to put stuff in paragraphs, too, and you'll probably need a beta reader at some point. I think you should make longer chapters, too. It's really unfair to your readers to only have one or two paragraphs in a chapter and expect them to review and tell you it was great, it just doesn't happen. I would suggest trying to write at least 5 pages at first, and then gradually writing more. Sorry if I sound snobbish or anything, but I just wanted to give you some tips so you can improve your story. It is your story and you don't have to take my advice, but I just wanted to let you know.
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Reviewed By: Yo Mama On: January 18, 2004 18:26 CST
Comment/Review:
Okay, I like your story so far, it sounds pretty good, but I think you need to add some more details, and put more sentances and paragraphs in. You'll probably want a beta reader at some point.
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Reviewed By: **InFaMoUs On: December 22, 2003 17:48 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOOK NICE CUTE SHORT FANFIC....YOUR JUST MISSING ONE THING AND DATS PICCOLO...HEHE...
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Reviewed By: PeuTiFuL JaNe On: December 04, 2003 23:26 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey hey i liked ur fanfic but it was way too short!! keep up the kewl work!! :)
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Reviewed By: bimbo an ditz On: November 20, 2003 04:40 CST
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v gud fic plz update soon!!!!! last chappy woz a bit short tho bt neva mind it woz still gud hope to see more up soon bye byez bimbo an ditz ps soz 4 the rush but we in our stupid biology lesson do we gtg now byeeeee
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Reviewed By: ReDiCuLoUsLy_gOoDlooKiNg On: October 09, 2003 22:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yeah i like it the stlye that you've decide to write it as.so can you please continue to write it...please and thanks
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