| "The Silk Robe" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Title: kill hojo kill hojo
Reviewed By: g0n4craZyloc0 On: June 07, 2005 19:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
hojo is an ass and u should have added more better things like makin kagome slap hojo o and you need more arousin parts i didnt think it was all that i actually got bored of it.
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Reviewed By: Dark Avenger [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 02:52 CDT
Comment/Review:
okay so the authors note thing was kind of annoying but other than that it was good. I liked the fact that Inu had to watch Kagome and Hojo on a date... sadistic... yes, indeed. :0)
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Reviewed By: Hiimbob979 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2004 12:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Overall a pretty good fanfic, but the lemon scene just wasnt desciptive enough to be much of a turn-on for me. You need more intimate descriptions of what is going on, and I would also suggest you write more of the story. I would also like to invite you to read a story of my own creating, "the Order of the Purple RObe". It doesnt have any lemon scenes, just more violence. I look forward to your review, as well. Chapter 14 comes out monday! Thanxs a ton, and keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: angelbabe17(not signed in) On: January 31, 2004 22:58 CST
Comment/Review:
gotta luv jealous inu
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Reviewed By: InuXkagome4eva On: November 24, 2003 16:58 CST
Comment/Review:
OMG!! it Hojo-baka still down there while they're fucking eavother!!! Hojo should have walked in on them and inuyasha should have slaughtered HIUM!!! MuHAHAHAHAHAHA
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Reviewed By: Yoraeryu [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2003 10:58 CDT
Comment/Review:
Pretty good, I'd say. Inu-kun possesiveness all the way! Mwuahaha... Yea, I'd agree with your other reviewers, know how to spell waist, and make the lemons longer. Not that mine are any better... worse, really. K, so you beat me with the lemon's thing, but I won the spelling bee. I hate bees... -.- ^^ Ah, excuse me, I like to ramble a LOT. And this is the end of the fic? Naw, come on! Make a sequel, it's good! Pwease?? >^_._^< Meow?? |
Reviewed By: Dragon's Lover [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2003 12:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I reviewed this fic because I know how much important reviews can be to a writer. My review on your fic: I think the rating says it all. However, I have a very blunt nature, so here's some tips. 1. Make the lemon longer; add more thoughts and feelings in the pair. 2. Add more detail all around, and use metaphors like "I could feel a sun building within me" instead of "I was getting really hot." See? Makes everything better.
These are a few of the things I've learned over my time as an author.
Oh, yeah. Loved the fic so far! Continue it - but as a sequal. Like maybe a few months later, or just a week. Be creative. Eh. . .I'll end this now. |
Reviewed By: Babsie On: August 06, 2003 23:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
Is it the end?
I hope not.
Keep writing.
Good work! |
Reviewed By: AISURU On: August 07, 2003 09:36 CDT
Comment/Review:
Ack! I was enjoying this story, but then you had Inuyasha grab onto Kagome's waste (instead of her waist) and that mistake always makes me cringe because of Sailor Moon MST fics I used to read, where the senshi were forced to read bad SM fanfics, and everytime someone grabbed someone else's waste that characters all went, "Ewwww!"
Okay, the rant is over. I'll go back to reading the rest of your fic now. Thanks for posting. |
