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Reviewed By: Lightice [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2007 15:06 CST
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I would point one thing from the latest chapter: Ritsuko's hair colour has nothing directly to do with Gendo. For one thing, Yui was light brunette, whereas Ritsuko shares her natural hair-colour with her mother, which is dark purple. This is also why she's blonded it - she wishes to distance herself from her mother. You might want to check your character speech-patterns a bit - sometimes the characters use expressions I have hard time imagining for them. Also, I can't quite fit butch Maya in my mindset, although she is rather boyish. Other than that your writing is quite enjoyable. Please keep it coming! Practice makes perfect!
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Title: dennisud
Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2006 20:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok first this is a very enjoyable read and a well written story. Its a little heavily one sided with their relationships but its still ok by me. My main critique is that Shinji has to come back mainly for Asuka and Rei. Yui being guilt ridden might cause an accident but I think if they find a pluausible way to bring Shinji back then I wouild suggest growing a Rei clone body, accelerate her growth and transfer Yui into it. I think The relationship now developing are healthy and plausible and as long as you don't go overboard with crossovver characters it will stay good. Finally I hope that with Rei and Asuka wanting Shinji back so badly he will take this as a start for him to come out of his shell. And this Rei and Asuka will care for him enough to do that. Thats what I hope to see. dennisud
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Reviewed By: seele89 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2006 13:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was one of the best fan fiction stories i've ever read I can't wait to read more.
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Reviewed By: seele89 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2006 13:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was one of the best fan fictions i've ever read I can't wait to read more
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Reviewed By: seele89 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2006 13:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was one of the best fan fictions i've ever read I can't wait to read more
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Reviewed By: Kit Vampie On: August 18, 2005 19:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like how you actually continued the story rather than just go off on a little branch, then snap the branch and let all your characters die. This way, if someone got permission, they could take your story to new heights, add new characters or something. I've only gotten to like ch. 8, but I really like how you set it up so far, and I admire your skills. Even though I'm an avid reader, I can't write anything worth reading ;(
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Reviewed By: Name/Nick On: March 31, 2005 19:51 CST
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Meh. So, Third Impact made everyone except Misato into a lesbian, even though no one other than Maya ever previously gave any sign of batting for the other team, and Shinji is on a mental vacation while Yui uses his body? Meh, I say. Meh.
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Title: Great!
Reviewed By: The 13th Knight On: November 05, 2004 19:11 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another great fic, Shane! I've ben following up, and I like how you've not only taken the characters from the End of Evangelion, but you also developed them beyond the anime.I also like how you found yet another Rei, but a different one. That new Rei made the whole Rei/Asuka relationship alot more fitting. Also, I like how you finally let Maya catch Ritsuko at last. Yes! Shinji's finally awoken! I can't wait to see what he's going to do, now. I won't who he'll be paired with, now that most of his normal pairings are taken? Maybe Kaworu? Great job with Misato! I love how her character is, now changed at all, but still, in some, small, subtle way, she's a bit more, well, grown-up. I hope she eventually gets someone to love, too, cause such a woman as that shouldn't be alone. Great job, Shane!
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Reviewed By: ChAoTiC-LoRd On: July 17, 2004 00:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm not reading anything without shinji in it. I'm just skipping the chapter without shinji.
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Reviewed By: Lord Aaron [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2004 16:38 CDT
Comment/Review:
Your realy like the EVA female pairings dont you... ^_^
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Reviewed By: Lord Aaron [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2004 17:03 CDT
Comment/Review:
I didnt know you wrote FF to shane, im feeling like an idiot here. Anyways, keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: LZ On: March 01, 2004 20:43 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story and how Asuka & Rei come together. I honestly think they're a far better match than when either of them are paired with Shinji...and I'll probably stand by that up until I die. NEWAY, good job and keep it coming!
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Reviewed By: Best Ever On: February 02, 2004 02:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
All I can say is I want the next few chapters plz ^^
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Reviewed By: L33tfic [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2003 19:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
pretty good fic. I really like the thing going on between Maya and Ritsuko. anyway, keep up the good work! please post more chapters!
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Reviewed By: RJ On: October 05, 2003 18:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's that Baka Shinji and Wonder Girl's fault too aint it??? lol any ways good story line im startting to wonder my idea is that the whole 3rd impact was an illusion and maybe shinji might come back sooner or later and What will happen??? will there be a newer threat bigger than the angels????
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