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| "The Life of Erin Tribal" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: Wow, not bad:-)
Reviewed By: AmyAnderson45 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2003 09:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
What happened? How come your other fanfictions are not like this? You can write girl so why did you stop with all the descriptions? I read Chapters 1-8 and I will eventually read the rest but...I know that "but" means something bad. I liked your character Erin Tribal but your story is not surprising. This is a novel size fanfiction that only something so bored like me could ever understand. I noticed how you end the chapters...it's not attention-grabbing. Since this is sooo long you need to get to the point of your story. What's the conflict? Chapters 1-8 only talked about a note, Erin's birthday, and something else I don't remember. You need to decide the story-line properly. Yes, the story's about Erin but what makes her story different from everybody else? Every part of your story needs a surprise...something that will make the reader say, "Oh my goodness, what just happened?" You can't just tell a story about something's birthday and expect people to read it and say, "I have never seen a birthday before." Everyone has whether they liked it or not. I will read further into your story because I would like to know how you set up your fight scene. Good luck to you and keep on writing. | Reviewed By: erintribal [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2003 03:19 CDT
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just so you know, this ISN'T 658 PAGES LONG. It's actually 177 pages long. ANd besides, ever heard of the little thing called "Favorites"? Use it and bookmark where you are and come back to it later! | Reviewed By: Prophecy Weapon [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2003 23:57 CDT
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Sorry, but I think your crazy if you expect people to read 653 pages of typed chapters! What exactly was going through your head when you posted this? I advise taking out all but one or two chapters, and leaving it like that for a while. Dont post so many chapters in one day, NO ONE is going to read them all like that. The best thing you could do is release a chapter a week or something.
Sorry if you found it harsh, but thats just craza. | Reviewed By: Kitty_-_Catz On: September 08, 2003 20:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
hehe....I really liked that battle scene! It was very interesting and the chapter was descriptive and long. I was really impressed with the length. |
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