| "The REAL Surprise!" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
Reviewed By: thyme_cat [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2005 11:21 CDT
Comment/Review:
Seemed a bit rushed, even for a one-shot. I'm under the impression that they didn't take off their clothing, just moved it aside, but you could clearify that since there seems to be some confusion. Kagome's reaction was a little ooc. a spontaneous kiss, yeah, sex by the well in the middle of the day... I'm not so sure. For smut it was very good *^_^*
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Reviewed By: Dark Avenger [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 21:21 CDT
Comment/Review:
nice... better than the gum I must say!
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Title: allright
Reviewed By: Lunar_Storm [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2005 00:26 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
NOW THATS FUCKING BETTER OMG lol if u wouldnt of wrote this too i thin i really would of wanted to kill u xD but anyway this story is the shit more people need to write like that ^_^ i would go crazy if more people did (id write my own but aaaaa i allways loose them or something) but anyway WRITE MORE LIKE THEM bye bye
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Reviewed By: Tamababy's baby On: July 29, 2004 21:54 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Where the hell were their clothes? They vanish or something? Oh well, good story, I liked it, pretty intense for a short fic. love you! xoxo
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Reviewed By: kitty kitsune On: May 04, 2004 06:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
that's much better over and out
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Title: kool!
Reviewed By: ang3lic_pl4ya [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2004 09:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
lol i liked it.
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Reviewed By: ????? On: January 12, 2004 22:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I didn't realy like it.It was short and yes i do know it is a one-shot fic.I think you should spend more time watching "Inuyasha".I also just didn't like your style of wrighting.It didn't sound like you put your heart into this fic.I liked it but think it needs improvement.
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Reviewed By: ????? On: January 12, 2004 22:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I didn't realy like it.It was short and yes i do know it is a one-shot fic.I think you should spend more time watching "Inuyasha".I also just didn't like your style of wrighting.It didn't sound like you put your heart into this fic.I liked it but think it needs improvement.
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Reviewed By: Melphina_xgp [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2003 01:13 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
WAIT A MINUTE! I'd like to know when Inuyasha and Kagome took their clothes off. Can someone please tell me when that happened? Anyway, I liked suprise better. The gum ending was better. Besides, you put the Did put the fanfiction under hentai so hah! Suprise Factor: 10 out of 10
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Reviewed By: 12blue12 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2003 20:21 CST
Comment/Review:
ok both endings were good but SURPRISE had an evil ending.
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Title: Kagome4061
Reviewed By: Kagome4061 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2003 08:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I olny read fics where Inuyasha and Kagome are couples and in this fic they are certainly couples. Write more fics with lemons about inu yasha and kagome.
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Title: YAY!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: Slash_the_donut_eating_freak [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2003 16:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THAT WAS SO CUTE!!! o yea....what was that he smelled...o well it might seem strange for me to be saying it's cute but it was!! well bye bye 4 now! ~Slash~
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Reviewed By: Koyote On: October 05, 2003 22:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Koyote here again. Well, well I liked it. The other ending with the gum and all, yeah that was hi-larious! But really, if I hadn't noticed this lemony alternate ending I wouldn't have stopped that angry mob with pitch forks and torches from knocking down your door. Oh, yeah and they had clowns with'em too so you just consider yourself lucky.
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Title: Momma Cat
Reviewed By: Momma Cat [MediaMiner Member] On: September 16, 2003 01:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
I liked Surprise better,with that little twist you gave but reading lemons are good. You don't gulp them like lemonade, you savor them, like fine chocolate... why am I writing this? Good story! |
Reviewed By: Precious [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2003 01:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
How can such a short lemon be so intense? It was certainly not the most descriptive one I've ever read but still.....And I like the way you ended it. About InuYasha not trusting his mouth. Although I would still like to know what that smell was. (I bet your thinking how can I write so much for a oneshot.) Easy. It's a gift! Think how it would if it was chapters long! Anywho great story
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