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| "Bird in a Cage" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] | Title: to all yaoi writers out there
Reviewed By: Saru the black fox [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2009 15:16 CST
Comment/Review:
please i beg of you to post your yaoi stories under the yaoi genre
| Reviewed By: fLcL_FFx_lovr [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2006 22:52 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
write more!!!!!both this and sand in a coge are really good. please update *gets down on knees dramaticly* PLEASE!!!!!!! *sob*
| Reviewed By: Toki Mirage (signed out) On: September 05, 2004 21:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story! I've read it before on aff.net, but i don't think i reviewd for it. Anyway, considering you translated this from german, the grammer is very good except for a few sots here and there. But that's okay, because i make lots of mistakes in my chapters that i don't fix, cuz i dont read them over *blushes* anyway, keep writing, and i think you should TOTALLY make a sequel to this, i mean, ITS JUST SO GOOD!! ^^
| Reviewed By: Inochi no Chi On: February 16, 2004 17:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Style of Writing This was very good - nice description, etc, etc, except for a few run on scentences, or repetitive phrases. Also, Sasuke seemed just a trifle out of character. Spelling/Grammar This too was very nice, save a very few mistakes. Creativity The pairing alone seems to warrant a seven, but the manner of getting them together seems to have been overdone. I see this type of plot sequence a lot: Chance Meeting -> Sparring -> Lemon/Lime Scene. While I understand that this could very well be the only logical way to maneuver them into this situation, something a bit newer might have been more pleasant. On the other hand, the logic behind it sounded much better than "We're lonely, we're sweaty, let's get it on." And so, I give this section a nine. Enjoyment Factor I love Yaoi. Sasuke and Neji are my favorite characters in Naruto. The story is well written, and the pairing had logic behind it. Also, the sex scene was vauge and poetic while being specific and real, and did not remind me in any way of Lady Chatterley's Lover as so many other introspective-type fics of this nature have. Definitely a ten for this area. Side Note I, too wish that there were more SasuNeji fanfics out there, along with believable, well-written SasuSaku and Neji-centric fanfics, but ah, dreams go so often unrealized...
| Title: ^_^
Reviewed By: GirTheCatGirl@msn.com On: January 20, 2004 17:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yay! I liked it. I didn't find anything wrong with the translation. this is my 2nd time to read a Neji/Sasuke ficcy and I think I like the coupling as well. Not obsessed but I like it.
| Reviewed By: shadypony [MediaMiner Member] On: September 16, 2003 11:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is the first story I have read with this pairing and I actually think I like it. Sasuke was a bit out of character, but it's rather hard to write him in character. You did a good job though. I see no problem with the translation except at the begining. It says "can't find no sleep" it should be "can't find any sleep". Other thatn that there are no problems.
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