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| "Troubled Times" Reviews/Comments [ 21 ] | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] | Reviewed By: Blue-eyed Fox < Lunarblue_2002@yahoo.com > On: February 19, 2004 23:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it. yes, as I've said before in FDF.net I love it. Sorry, if I reviewed it with the comment on the Censored thing but the onlytime I got to look at your bio was after i reviewed. My mistake I know... but still, this is a very nice fic. I like it.
| Reviewed By: Yuki Fuyumi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2004 05:38 CST
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It's always nice to find a well-written x-over between Weiß and YnM, so of course I was glad to find this fic. There are, however, a few things that irritated me somewhat... Such as the fact that you write "Terezuma" when his name Terazuma... I don't know why it irritates me so much, though. -_-;; Then when you mentioned that Wakaba might not have been her actual last name, that made me frown. Wakaba is her given name. Kannuki is her family name. (Although I can understand where this can be misunderstood, if you check the kanji, "wakaba" is a typical first-name-combination...) And the last thing that made me frown was the way you switch back and forth between different tenses. (Spelling and stuff I don't really have a trouble with, seeing as I'm not a native speaker when it comes to English, I'm not one to complain.) This is okay when it happens between scenes, but it gets confusing when the switch happens during a paragraph, without any obvious reason, or sometimes it goes from past to present to past in one sentence. It's just confusing, but might be intentional on your part... Other than that, I have only good things to say. It's an interesting plot that pulls the reader along, and makes one want to know more. And the Nagi-characterization is great, as usual and expected with Yanagi-sen ::bow bow:: as co-author. I suppose I should head on and read up on the later parts on ff.net, now, though... And keep up the good work! ^_^
| Title: We love this but...
Reviewed By: The Chaotic Ones [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2004 14:15 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
We enjoy this a lot!! we hope you continue soon!!!! we finaly got to the end too!! why cant BB and the other kid have a relationship? every one else is.... and about Tsuki and the doc, WTF ARE YOU THINKING!!!!!!!!! not that the lemons arent nice... But still!!!! Tsu-chan is for Hisoka!!! *in our opinion* write more soon please!!! ^__________^
| Reviewed By: Yue TKS On: December 02, 2003 20:27 CST
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I like it, I think the idea is orignal, I like the kind of writting, and the plot is interesting ^^ please keep it up
| Reviewed By: LN On: September 18, 2003 15:38 CDT
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Hopefully here you won't have to worry about certain parties complaining about graphic scenes.
The woman after Watari is nuts. I hope Schu gets to her first. I can just imagine what she'll suffer then.
Wonderful fic, and looking forward to the next part. | Title: eh? what title? O_o ...it's the Working for the Koala fic, fi that's what it's asking....
Reviewed By: Dogmatix On: September 18, 2003 01:33 CDT
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ah, for chapter one. It's a very good fic so far, and I'm going to keep reading now, but I just had to say this. Phosphoric acid. Not phosphate. Phosphate is an ion composed of one phosphorous atom and four oxygen atoms and has a negative three charge. Phosphoric acid is phosphate with three hydrogen atoms added on. I realize you're probably not a chemistry major(neither am I), and I'm going to turn a blind eye to Watari's whole explanation to Schuldig of what he's doing, but please, Phosphoric acid, ne? ^_^ | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] |
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