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| "Troubled Times" Reviews/Comments [ 21 ] | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] | Title: Fubar indeed....
Reviewed By: The Chaotic Ones~ *not signed in right now.... On: May 07, 2004 20:53 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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that was... uhmm... unexpected to say the least.... More soon please, its GOOD!!! and yes.... fubar indeed.... what about the crazy irish man out of curiosity? will he be in this? Well, more soon please!! ^___^
| Reviewed By: Fanfic Crazy Chibi On: May 04, 2004 15:39 CDT
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I LOVE this Fanfic! Keep up the good work! ^_^
| Reviewed By: Gravedigger17 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2004 01:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your ideas are absolutely wonderful, and the fic is enjoyable! However, you have a slight tendency to play around with the tenses... I've noticed that you'll switch back and forth between present and past tense, even in the middle of a scene! It can cause quite a headache for the reader. Also, it seems that in your editing... you've placed a scene in a little too early. There's a scene where Youji and Kijin are speaking, and it's NOT in the 'living plane' (please excuse me, I've forgotten the name for where Kijin lives). However, Kijin and the others had not left the Weiss flowershop, yet. You may want to take a look at that. (or perhaps I'm just going insane, I don't know....) All in all, very good though. Please continue writing, I enjoy reading the story.
| Reviewed By: ^___________^ On: April 13, 2004 13:50 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is GREAT!!!!!! we just got the update notice in our inbox (oops) and this is great!!! Hisoka/Tsu-chan is a MUCH better pairing!!! ^____^ YAY!!!! it finaly looks like Tsu-chan will be rescued!!!! about frieken time..... Well more soon please this is great!!!
| Title: Hehehe....
Reviewed By: The Chaotic Ones~ *not signed in right now.... On: March 22, 2004 23:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
we love this and hope you continue soon, and who is mastermind going to hook up with now that he's learning about the human side of his nature? That shinigami who's helping him or is he going to go back to orical? i dont much like orical in this, but thats ok i supose.... Well please write more soon when you can, we love this!!!!
| Reviewed By: toscas_kiss On: March 16, 2004 00:06 CST
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These last few chapters are excellent! The Esset plot keeps getting more evil and twisted, and I'm on the edge of my seat about Muraki and Aya. And Oracle definitely needs to catch a clue! Looking forward to the next installation. Thanks for the entertainment.
| Title: more please.. *puppy eyes*
Reviewed By: Simon Erif [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2004 21:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
More more more more more.... please more!! fantastic story but want to know more!!!
| Reviewed By: The Chaotic Ones~ On: March 03, 2004 23:09 CST
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^_________________________________^ NICE!!!!! please update soon, and we are sorry to hear about your sister, what happend? None of our biz but still, we're sorry. Hope you are doing better though and we still love this fic a lot!! thankies!!!
| Title: the last chapter and the chapter before that are the same
Reviewed By: The chaotic ones (not loged in) On: February 21, 2004 16:59 CST
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| Reviewed By: Blue-eyed Fox < Lunarblue_2002@yahoo.com > On: February 19, 2004 23:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it. yes, as I've said before in FDF.net I love it. Sorry, if I reviewed it with the comment on the Censored thing but the onlytime I got to look at your bio was after i reviewed. My mistake I know... but still, this is a very nice fic. I like it.
| Reviewed By: Yuki Fuyumi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2004 05:38 CST
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It's always nice to find a well-written x-over between Weiß and YnM, so of course I was glad to find this fic. There are, however, a few things that irritated me somewhat... Such as the fact that you write "Terezuma" when his name Terazuma... I don't know why it irritates me so much, though. -_-;; Then when you mentioned that Wakaba might not have been her actual last name, that made me frown. Wakaba is her given name. Kannuki is her family name. (Although I can understand where this can be misunderstood, if you check the kanji, "wakaba" is a typical first-name-combination...) And the last thing that made me frown was the way you switch back and forth between different tenses. (Spelling and stuff I don't really have a trouble with, seeing as I'm not a native speaker when it comes to English, I'm not one to complain.) This is okay when it happens between scenes, but it gets confusing when the switch happens during a paragraph, without any obvious reason, or sometimes it goes from past to present to past in one sentence. It's just confusing, but might be intentional on your part... Other than that, I have only good things to say. It's an interesting plot that pulls the reader along, and makes one want to know more. And the Nagi-characterization is great, as usual and expected with Yanagi-sen ::bow bow:: as co-author. I suppose I should head on and read up on the later parts on ff.net, now, though... And keep up the good work! ^_^
| Title: We love this but...
Reviewed By: The Chaotic Ones [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2004 14:15 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
We enjoy this a lot!! we hope you continue soon!!!! we finaly got to the end too!! why cant BB and the other kid have a relationship? every one else is.... and about Tsuki and the doc, WTF ARE YOU THINKING!!!!!!!!! not that the lemons arent nice... But still!!!! Tsu-chan is for Hisoka!!! *in our opinion* write more soon please!!! ^__________^
| Reviewed By: Yue TKS On: December 02, 2003 20:27 CST
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I like it, I think the idea is orignal, I like the kind of writting, and the plot is interesting ^^ please keep it up
| Reviewed By: LN On: September 18, 2003 15:38 CDT
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Hopefully here you won't have to worry about certain parties complaining about graphic scenes.
The woman after Watari is nuts. I hope Schu gets to her first. I can just imagine what she'll suffer then.
Wonderful fic, and looking forward to the next part. | Title: eh? what title? O_o ...it's the Working for the Koala fic, fi that's what it's asking....
Reviewed By: Dogmatix On: September 18, 2003 01:33 CDT
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ah, for chapter one. It's a very good fic so far, and I'm going to keep reading now, but I just had to say this. Phosphoric acid. Not phosphate. Phosphate is an ion composed of one phosphorous atom and four oxygen atoms and has a negative three charge. Phosphoric acid is phosphate with three hydrogen atoms added on. I realize you're probably not a chemistry major(neither am I), and I'm going to turn a blind eye to Watari's whole explanation to Schuldig of what he's doing, but please, Phosphoric acid, ne? ^_^ | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] |
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