| "Now And Forever" Reviews/Comments [ 109 ] |
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Reviewed By: Dreamfox WindWolf [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2004 17:22 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
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Title: EVILNESS!
Reviewed By: KaoruKasshin [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2004 18:34 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YOUR SO EVIL!! I am so sad for them, i am gonna cry...
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Reviewed By: Kasey-chan On: December 31, 2003 11:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the concept
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Reviewed By: goddess of inuyasha On: December 22, 2003 22:42 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow i read the lil question at the end of yur chapter bout kikyou getting dumped in a river and ya kno wat? thata is a really good idea! i wish someone would do that in the story, maybe wed finally be rid of the biotch. sorry kikyou fans, but i think that there no way in hell kagome could have come from such a person. shes so much betta than her! ne way, keep up with the story, great job, just could ya b a lil more careful wit the spelling? thx..***goddess of inuyasha***
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Reviewed By: Lady Fang On: December 16, 2003 17:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved your story. It was awesome. I hate Kikyo too. Glad you killed her. You need to write a sequel. Your story was great.
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Reviewed By: tgyf On: December 04, 2003 09:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great story love it
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Reviewed By: Higurashi Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2003 12:53 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wish it wasn't over but ever thing has an end can't wait 2 read more of your work
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Title: I hate writing bad reviews for otherwise good stories...
Reviewed By: Little John of Locksland On: November 19, 2003 18:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hate writing bad reviews and ratings for stories that in most ways deserve good ones. However, you lost some major points in light of the excessive spelling and grammar mistakes both in that category and in the enjoyment factor (I personally find myself enjoying a story a lot less if I have to interpret the words on a constant basis...) which naturally enough lowered the overall score as well. You seem to follow a recent common fanfic-author error I've noticed of misusing while/well/will as if not these authors do not understand the meaning of the three words. You also are deeply embedded within the mistaken mindset of accept/except being in their reversed meanings. It is such a common mistake that I have a form-response of how to fix it: Good story which left me with only one complaint. Now, before I get into that complaint, please bear in mind that I am not attempting to flame you, nor insult you, but rather to assist or teach you on something that is a sadly all too common fault among fanfiction writers. I do this not because I like to feel better than others but rather because I want to see your work as close to perfect as possible and after this fix yours will be very close indeed. Now then, you need to get straight within your own mind the difference between "accept" and "except" since it is clear you currently are extremely confused in that matter. I saw both words used but they were both used wrongly, you used one where needed to use the other. "Accept" means to include while "except" means to exclude. If it will make it easier to remember in your mind think of it like this - "accept" begins with an "A" the same as the word "allow" whereas "except" begins with an "Ex" such as an ex-wife or husband. Here's some sentences to hopefully illustrate better the usages of each word. "Everyone except Jimmy was picked to be on the team." "The coach accepted everyone but Jimmy to be on the team." - In the first sentence Jimmy was solo'd out by the word "except" as being seperate from the rest of the crowd, in the second sentence "accept" was used for the crowd then the word "but" solo'd Jimmy out. Now that the concept has been established I'll show you a few more sentences to let it sit in a bit more. "I will not accept any compromises." "I will make exceptions for those of you who really try your best." "Accepting the award for her brother will be Mellissa." "This food is good, I guess, except it is a little bland." "Your brother got accepted into Oxford, isn't that great?!" "This is hardly a scientific marvel, but it is at least acceptable I suppose." I hope I've adequately established the different usages of the two words within your own mind and any others who needed it that may see this review. - That's the end of the accept/except form-response. Unfortunately it wasn't your only grammar or spelling error which really lowerred that score in my rating. Fortunately though you really have other areas crucial to writing perfected which means that once you clean up your spelling and grammar you will be one of the few flawless fanfiction writers. That day will be a very hard and arduous time in coming however as you will most likely be struggling against your grammar skills for quite a while to come. Other than my complaint regarding that particular set of skills, however, this was a wonderful story and I would have liked to give it a higher set of ratings if circumstances and your grammar skills had been different. Perhaps you will take the time to improve those skills and then clean up the multitude of nagging errors that are found throughout the story. I hope that possibility comes true as I will gratefully raise the ratings up in light of such an improvement in the language quality.
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Reviewed By: ice_princess_1185 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2003 20:29 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you are very welcome i thank you for writing a very good story bye : )
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Reviewed By: Kaye [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2003 19:14 CST
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Great ending. Wonderful ending!!!!!!!!!! And they all want a couch! I can't wait until your next stories, must see if they are made yet! Must read more!!!!
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Title: lo!
Reviewed By: Slywolf9 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2003 18:16 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i LOVED it! it was suuuuuchhhh a good story! im glad Kagura and Roshi got together! i LOVED this story, and thanks soooo much for making it! it was REALLY fun to read, and im sure your new story will be just as good! -Lani
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Reviewed By: Kaye [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2003 22:09 CST
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Can that bitch not die?!!!!!!!!!! Kill her!!!! Sesshy why did you not kill her!!!!!! She must die!!!! Really good chapter!
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Title: lo
Reviewed By: Slywolf9 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2003 19:11 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
eep! that dead bitch better get the HELL off of KAgome!!! *see, i didnt even mind calling her a bitch this itme!* er! *growls* and NO ONE says that my Sesshy-sama lies! Dammit! Naraku has to DIE a SLOW and PAINFUL death! muhahahaha! ne wayz, this was a GREAT chapter! glad Sesshy-sama stuck up for Yash! hehe-Kawaii!! ne wayz- i really LOVED this chapter, and i cant wait for nmore okay! -Lani
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Reviewed By: Kaye [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2003 13:43 CST
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Kkyo and Naraku both need to die, horribly. Please kill them!!!!!!!!!!!! Really good!
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Title: yasmin
Reviewed By: Secrets [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2003 18:25 CST
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you are mean , what is up with all the cliffhangers. lol. update soon , i like this , hey why dont you hook sesshy up with somebody and what about roshi , he sounds cute .lol
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