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| "There For You" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Reviewed By: fire and napalm [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2004 22:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MMMPHH! I don't know whether to sigh at the sap or laugh at it. it was endlessly amusing. Bashing characters is FUN! ANd it apparently doesn't matter whether I normaly like them or not, because I am quite partial to Rath/Cesia. Yes, Rath and Bierrez are quite OOC but whatever. I found it entertaining. Besides where would we come up with all these crazy ideas if we weren't allowed to deviat from the written norm? True, I do like accuracy but I, apparently, am forgiving of a deviation. Heck, my favourite YYH pairing is a hermaphroditic Hiei with Kurama or Yusuke. if that isn't a deviation I don't know what is. But I digress. Great fic, I really had a good laugh. Your lemon was okay but a bit of work won't hurt.( That feels weird to say) Write more and have fun! Off to check our your other fics( if any yet) and more!
| Reviewed By: Jeii On: December 30, 2003 23:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmm...not bad...though you might want to learn more about the male anatomy before writing a yaoi fanfic. Overall, it's okay...but both Rath and Bierrez were pretty OOC. Rath is definitely not so submissive as you've written him, or so wimpy...and he can't cry, either. (one of the wierd quirks that Ohkami-sensei gave him) Plus, the whole coupling is kinda improbably, seeing as Bierrez has been in love with Cesia from the first. Sometimes these unusual couplings work...but you have to shape the characters by events in your stories to make the coupling plausible, which is something that wasn't really done here. Finally...both the lemons were very similar, and just seemed like copies of each other with a few words changed here and there. Also, the Cesia bashing was completely unjustified...ony very immature writers implausibly bash a character in their writing because they dislike them. Sorry if this came out a bit like a flame, but I think you've got some work to do. Really, I enjoy yaoi enough if it's done right...otherwise it just comes off as tasteless and smutty. Keep working on it! I'm sure if you really try to improve, your writing will get much better very quickly. Don't give up! ~Jeii
| Reviewed By: millenniumspirit [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2003 10:43 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! It's really hard finding good Dragon Knights yaoi/lemon fics, keep up the good job!
| Title: YAY!
Reviewed By: IcaBob On: November 08, 2003 02:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY! Finally someone wrote a yaoi fic on Dragon Knights. GEEZ You have to continue writing more, cus I SUCK at writing so you have to do it. ^_^ Keep up the great work! Love & Peace
| Reviewed By: lil miss crazy On: October 11, 2003 18:13 CDT
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ick! so amazingly fluffy!!!!! fluff everywhere!!! aaaahhh!!! but it still good. don worry not tryin ta be mean.
| Title: first
Reviewed By: Tanna On: October 02, 2003 22:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was great! For no other reason than that there is WAY too little dragon knights fanfiction. But it was also a good story and a coupling I'd never thought of before. Thinking back though, it's very possible. I don't know if it would have been that easy to get Bierrez accepted though. I mean, he did try to kill everyone. If you ever want to tackle it, there's lots of potential angst there. I would try, but I can't write fiction worth crap. Keep it up!
| Title: LOVED YOUR STORIES
Reviewed By: Hells Librarian [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2003 22:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my gosh! That story was so adorable! So was the prequel to this story! You need to write more! I should put some stuff up when I get a chance. ^__^ Keep it up!!!
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