| "The Start of a New Destiny" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Title: bervo whahr's-mai-in-this
Reviewed By: dr-fan/mai-lover On: February 03, 2009 17:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
bervo whaher's-mai-in-this reammer-joy-loves-mai-tow-mauch
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Title: whan-is-heila-going-meet duke&mai-bkurka
Reviewed By: dr-fan/mai-lover On: March 06, 2008 20:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yah the raturin-dmg&landairydragion/kaigth-why! whan-is-going-meet-bkeurka&sto&duke&mai
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Reviewed By: puremoon [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2006 19:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
there are few errors to your story. the life point rised from 700 to 2500 for jou in the last chapter, althroght it would not effect the out come. alos you can't offer a scap goat for moster summon.
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Reviewed By: t recorder On: July 07, 2006 11:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i ll make it short and simpal update plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz is yamihelia yamis wife if yes the cool what will yami think .any way plz update . t recorder
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Title: Chapter 1 Review
Reviewed By: FlashPhnx [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2006 07:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry i am kinda new to this place. Its a long story that i wont bore you all with. Interesting first chapter thought i dont know if i approve of becoming Yugi's Girlfriend so spontainiously. It is just not in Yugi's character to jump into a relationship. I am not agaisnt Yugi having a girlfriend just try to at least let them build a friendship first. Well i guess ill find out when i read the next chapter. I am not too sure how this works so if i can review more then once you will hear from me in the next chapter. Well bye for now. Oh PS sorry about giving you a six for originallity but i have seen this done a few times before (not exactly the same so dont worry) and a 5 for eNjoyment factor because well tis the first chapter and i know how hard they can be becuase you gotta do all the boring stuff like setting up the plot and what not. Well see you in chapter 2... i hope.
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Reviewed By: lovely liz On: March 29, 2006 01:31 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow that is cool i realy like this story i hope u update soon i wounder if yugi and heila get to gether and if the sprites in the minelimin ever remaember each other anyways the only thing that is little confusing is the Jappanies words in steand of that its good
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Reviewed By: zach's-babe1 On: February 26, 2005 20:40 CST
Comment/Review:
o.m.g. this fic. is way good compareded to mine i am like a kinders wrighting i so cn't wait to read the next chap>o_0
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Reviewed By: YamiYugiMoto On: October 08, 2004 21:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
Quick! Write the next one! A bit shorted next time please! Its a little confusing with the Jappanie words... Great story
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Reviewed By: InsaneAuthoress [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2004 17:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great start but you really have to work on you spelling and grammer. Review your work or have a peer do it like anyfriends or family who will. Other then that great start! I'm glad Yugi has a GF to ^_~
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Title: Update
Reviewed By: digigirl [MediaMiner Member] On: November 02, 2003 19:49 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow please finish and please read my storys anyone. ^_^ thank you and update!!!!!
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