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| "Shattered Moments" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: water-soter On: March 06, 2004 19:02 CST
Comment/Review:
I so love this story! It's definetly one of my faves. I'm kinda hoping you'll add more parts to this story. water_soter@yahoo.com
| Title: *sweatdrops*
Reviewed By: Yira Heerai On: October 25, 2003 23:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
Dude, I know I put paragraphs in that! >
| Title: Ooohhh
Reviewed By: Yira Heerai On: October 25, 2003 23:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I remember reading this before, both on fanfiction.net and your site. I can't help it, I love the idea of what could have happened in Heero's past. ^_^ However, I don't remember reading any of the side stories. Those are quite new to me XD The idea that Heero might have known Treize, talked to him like a friend, and nearly kicked his ass at chess at the tender age of seven (or was it 8 o.O;) amuses the hell out of me. It also makes me wonder if he remembered meeting him at all; or if Treize knew when he met Heero again during the war. People change so much over time, ya know? For some reason that I can't really fathom, I keep imagining everyone watching this on tape. o_o; Like...some anonymous person sent in clippings of his life and sent it to the Preventers. Then Une, Duo, Trowa, Quatre, Wufei, Zechs, Noin, and Sally watch it o.O;;; Like it's some major part in some case. Why? I have no clue ._. Though it would be interesting to see everyone's reactions to Heero meeting Treize and Duo ^_^ Your grammar does need some work, though. You use present tense in places where past tense would be better (or so I think ^^;;) and a few phrases are out of place. If you want, I wouldn't mind beta reading for you ^^ I love reading stories and a lot of my friends use me as an editor of sorts o.O; Don't take it the wrong way, though. I'm not trying to insult you or say that you suck --you don't at all-- I'm just offering if you want it. My e-mail address is yira_heerai@yahoo.com if you want to take me up on the offer. I think I've rambled on long enough. *sweatdrop* Pretty soon, they'll have to tape my mout shut...Heh...
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