Reviewed By: wombat1138 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2004 08:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I found this fic practically by accident, via a Google keyword search for FB lemons; it's certainly one of the best ones I've read yet, with some very original concepts integrated into the plot, as well as a smooth narrative flow without annoying repetitions or random Japanese dialogue (or headhopping, thanks to the first-person POV). The only nitpick which kept nagging me throughout was that the dialogue was bunched up into clusters intead of being clearly paragraphed, but hey. Also, the narrator's identity wasn't clearly established until several paragraphs into the story, though perhaps that was assumed to be obvious from the pairing nickname (I've only just started reading FB fic). But overall, definitely a very good story; I'll be sure to peek at your other fic too >^_^
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