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| "Truth or Dare" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: eshfemme [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2006 00:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm not one to speak but I think you need to familiarize yourself with the way to upload fics as your fic chapters were actually written in the chapter summary box. It's pretty bad to do and can confuse some readers. I'm not a fan of screenplay method of writing dialogue when it comes to fanfiction as that is a very technical way of writing dialogue and isn't very organic to use in literary storytelling. In addition, your fic was at least 90% if not more than 95% dialogue. So to read a fic that's just an exchange of words between characters isn't very stimulating, much less humorous. Also, you might as well have written a generic template because you could probably just copy and paste any anime character's name in place of the DBZ characters and it would fit any fandom. That's a bad thing to have happen... Good first effort though. A good thing in your favor is your membername, which is pretty distinctive to use in DBZ fandom. He's also my favorite OP character, so I do hope that you live up to the greatness of the name. Another good trait you have is that you can write relatively coherently and you don't seem to have many grammatical and spelling errors. After seeing all the Internet writing with the fangirl OC Mary Sue-isms and just plain idiocy, I've become an English Nazi. So it's just a relief to not wince too much when I'm reading a fic or even just a fic summary. But there's not too much for me to evaluate anyway though since the chapters were short. Keep trying!
| Reviewed By: Free-sprit [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2005 10:14 CDT
Comment/Review:
errm.. That was weird. Is it jsut me, or was the story actually written in the summary-box thingy? Oh well, I didn't really get what it was all about... But maybe it was funny?
| Reviewed By: Jessyrocks15 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2005 21:17 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL!! That was funny u should do that agian but with gohan, trunks, and the other kids for another story.... n-e-way funny!!!!
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