| "Surrender" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Cliodhna Glen [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2004 20:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story had some interesting ideas in it. There were some odd phrases and spelling errors that tended to throw the flow of the story off. Berks seemed a bit out of character in areas. The killer taking both Dee and Ryo hostage seems implausible though not impossible. I think this one could be worked up with the aid of a good beta reader to be a solid fic.
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Reviewed By: Cor Cor On: February 17, 2004 20:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was soo sad. i loved it. Dee was so in charicter it was like reading the manga. You sshould have made it longer. Keep at it
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Reviewed By: trixie [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2004 16:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a good story. There were a couple of misspelled words or some sentences did not make since cuz of the spelling. This had some creativity to it because most of these stories on this site have something happening to ryo,but this story it was all about dee.Your details were plain and simple could of used a little more,atleast they were not overdone on this story.I was very curious about what was going to happen in the next chapter "just wish that it was not 4 chapters".
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Title: Funny Bunny
Reviewed By: Funny Bunny [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2003 21:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was worried after the rape thingy, I'm glad it ended on a happy note! Very shortly I'm coming over to this section to kick some major original ideas into you're heads! Don't worry, I share my ideas with everybody, you'll just have to wait to see what they are! Hee- hee!
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