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| "I'll Miss You For Eternity The Legacy" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: NSBVEGETA [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2004 16:14 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Girl u better update this story on MM please because im dying here so.............UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!! U MADE ME CRY1111111111111 :((
| Title: starbrella
Reviewed By: Star-brella [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2004 18:20 CDT
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AWWWWW!!!! This is sooo touching!!! >::sob sob::< Good job on this, so is the lanuage you used a song from somewhere, a poem? Is it japanese or did you make it up or own? it's really interesting!!! ^_^
| Reviewed By: Missing: My Sanity On: December 02, 2003 18:58 CST
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Ah yes...*swivels around in one of those tall-backed, comfy, and extremely posh office chairs* Ahem ahem. *clears throat* We are gathered here today-- *gets bitten by a rabid squirrel* Ow! You little--come back here! *chases squirrel around tree* Right right...where was I? What are these? Wedding vows? *throws papers over shoulder which, in turn, causes many unsuspecting bystanders to fall victim to the evil evilness known as the Papercut* Anyways, enough of this nonesense. *fights off squirrel army* Okay, the review...yes, the reason why I'm here being bombarded by acorns. *shakes fists at treetops* A pox on thee! *gasses the vicinity with sleeping gas and ignores the mass quantity of intoxicated squirrels thudding to the floor* Feh, you asked for it... Alright, I think I should get to the point. And the point being? *looks around confuzzled* Ah, right. I shall now attempt to review this wonderful piece of fiction to the best of my [limited] ability. I didn't give ratings, why? Simply because I detest numbers. They seem so...confining. And yes, I am aware that the number line does goes on to infinity but that does nothing to ease my numerophobia. I will, however, use the rating categories as my guideline. Now, with that said, onwards! Style of Writing: What can I say? It's unique, truly your own. One of the few good things in life you don't have to stick a disclaimer on. Ah, journalism... Spelling & Grammar: Nothing wrong in this department. I'm glad you're one of those authors who meticulously edit their work before posting it. Believe me, it's much appreciated. Now my eyes won't have to bleed every time I see a misplaced comma or notice a missing period. Jump for joy! People who say grammar isn't important should be SHOT ON SIGHT! Originality/Creativity: Well, I don't read DBZ fanfiction [save for the ones you decide to shove down my throat--kidding, kidding ^^] so I can't make a legitimate comment in this area. But I'm fairly confident it's not a cliche. Even if it was overdone, I'd bet your's would be a fresh outlook on it. The song was a nice touch, it really added to the drama. Enjoyment Factor: Oh yes, I loved bawling my eyes out. Quite the experience, if I do say so myself. On a more serious note; yes, it was a pleasure reading your story. =] Just one suggestion. You could space out the paragraphs a bit more. For example, when someone talks, go to the next line instead of continuing it in an already established paragraph. That way, the writing looks more flowing and poetic, instead of blocky. No offense meant and I trust you won't take it wrong way? ^^;; Overall Rating: 9.5!! Where's that half a point? Well now, if I gave you full credit, what are you gonna work for then, eh? You want that last .5? Come and get it!! Write write write!! Keep up the good work and don't let gravity [or the squirrels] bring you down!!! =] //where am i? who am i? why am i here? here. me. because.// -simply*complex- ANiLreZ
| Title: T__T
Reviewed By: Mushi_azn [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2003 03:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic..... I've read it like...90 times on ff.net It's one of my favourites T__T About time u brought it to mm.org to spread your talent ^^
| Reviewed By: Animechick15 On: November 30, 2003 17:18 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You made me cry!!It's soo sad I wanna now what happens now what about Vegeta and Trunks??
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