| "Kits, Cats, and Ryu" Reviews/Comments [ 47 ] |
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Title: kewl
Reviewed By: tetrambs [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2003 13:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Never seen a combo like that before! Though I think you should get into conversations a bit more between characters. Other than that I believe you've got the creation of a good series here. Though i suspect you'll need to diverge a bit more from the series a bit more, maybe need to explain how Sasuke and Sakura got into the exam and who the third member of their party is. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: aragan the third On: December 02, 2003 18:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
what the feck? small for a prolouge and that it's all squeezed into one paragraph...not good for a person reading it I should say. I give you some points for trying to go for a Naruto/ Flame of Recca/ Ranma 1/2 crossover...never think someone might for for that one... your spelling is okay from all those jumbled up words you have. this reads more like a Narrative or something as similar. also...saying that he just refused to commit sucide is really just plain I'd say...is there any reason WHY he didn't go through commiting the ritual sucide? Like wanting to live? thinking that it's stupid or something? give us a reason why he doesn't go through with it. get some proofreaders...as many as you can...it looks like you might need some to make this actually work unless you only just want to fill your ego AND not care about what you write about.
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