| "Why Do You Hate Me?" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
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Reviewed By: Alexandra_Michelle On: August 22, 2011 17:43 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think Johnny wouldve been a LOT more angry. A LOT. Hes asexual, that wouldve made him SO incredibly pissed, he wouldve punched a hole in the wall. BUT, you did make him cut into his forehead, thats a good way to pick it up, even if only a little. I dont think he wouldve been happy about the oral sex, i think he wouldve been furious. Especially since it was rape. You also went into too much detail over how it was a 'mysterious dark room'. Extremely OOC. I think Im mentally scarred. But I will say that this was entertaining. And the ending redeemed it a bit, that it was only a dream made a lot more sense. I write at late hours sometimes too, crazy stuff happens. So i dont blame you. |
Reviewed By: Anon. On: August 22, 2011 17:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
I couldn't stop laughing at this. So unbelievably OOC, especially Devi. Johnny would have been EXTREMELY pissed off at her, not just the normal pissed off. The end almost made the entire story redeemable, but barely. Your spelling and writing skills were quite iffy as well. Never will I look at the word ''Metaphor'' the same way ever again. |
Reviewed By: sailorunicorn [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2011 22:24 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great fic. Need a little brushing on spelling. |
Reviewed By: Spyn On: August 20, 2008 00:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really enjoyable, you should continue this as a series
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Reviewed By: Nethray [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2007 18:56 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. That was just really great. Devi mutilating herself? Serious originality (Or at least in what I've read so far... ^_^;)
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Reviewed By: southwest_cyba_ninja [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2006 22:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wicked sweet, write another.
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Reviewed By: Tjay Motou [MediaMiner Member] On: October 04, 2006 18:41 EDT
Comment/Review:
Not bad... not bad at all... I'm Nny/Todd fan... but this was good. hehe good job. It was very short... a little too short... you should write more.
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