Reviewed By: silverdemon87 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2004 23:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is fic is really good! I like the way you captured Soujiro's thoughts about his past as well as his current thoughts... however, (this is just a suggestion), try to reflect his thoughts on what Kenshin said to him during their fight. Soujiro was so affected by Kenshin's words that he grew angry... angry enough so that Kenshin could defeat him... Soujiro still doesn't understand the whole 'If you're strong, you live. If you're weak, you die..." thing... Anyways, the way you've put Tetsuya in it also, in my opinion affected Soujiro greatly, because technically, from Soujiro's perspective, Tetsuya is 'weak' because he is blind... Anyways, just a suggestion ^^ Well, I think I taken up enough space on this note... heh... so be sure to update!
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