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| "Paradox" Reviews/Comments [ 38 ] | | Pages (3): [ « < 1 2 3 > » ] | Reviewed By: Laura-chan (still too lazy to login) On: January 13, 2004 15:08 CST
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Well, well, this chapter was really interesting... I can't wait to read about everyone's reaction when they are going to see Naraku.... this is going to be funny ^_~ well, what can I say more? keep writing and update a.s.a.p.!
| Reviewed By: Relix On: January 12, 2004 04:11 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm putting this on my top list.
| Reviewed By: Airen [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2004 01:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi there. I just stumbled onto this fic tonight, and let me tell you, I read a few paragraphs and was immediately hooked. After wading through tons of crappy fanfics, I finally found one that was well-written. First of all, you can spell. I love you for that. Not many writers can spell around here, sadly. Your grammar is excellent and you have a very nice writing style. Also, this fic is pretty creative and revolves around a very original concept. It seems that most fanwriters don't focus on Shikon no Tama very much - just on the characters. I'm pleased that your plot seems pretty fleshed out. The lemon was also well-done, I think. Don't get me wrong, I'm not one of those weirdos who reads fics just for the lemon content, heh. Some things, though. First, like RedHerring said, five hundred years is an insanely long time. One would think the characters would have changed greatly over time. At least I think they would show signs of heightened maturity - especially Inuyasha himself. Second...does Kagome and Souta's mother know that they've been hanging out at Sesshoumaru's for several days? Maybe I accidentally skipped something, but I just wondered, heh. Mrs. Higurashi seems super anal-retentive now...she might notice if her kids were gone for an extended period of time. Er, sorry about all my nitpickings. Ummm...other than that, your story's really good. I'm so happy I finally found something worth reading in this section. I'm adding you to my favorites, and I hope you update soon. Keep up the good work! ;)
| Reviewed By: Van Stolin [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2003 21:59 CST
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I have to say one thing, you should put a warning that there is a lemon on a chapter, the fic does say hentai, but it would help to know which chapters would have it. Oh and some other stuff. I think it is safe to say you haven't seen much of Inuyasha. Well, I will have to tell you if you want to know that Naraku has a new body and it might make the story more interesting to use it. I could try to find a picture of it for you, if you want. You also might want to look for screens on the second Inuyasha movie for a surprise.
| Title: awesome job
Reviewed By: inugirl [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2003 20:05 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ooh i love your story so much. please update soon! great job! ^_^
| Reviewed By: Laura-chan (too lazy to login) On: December 28, 2003 05:27 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Ehy, that was really great! I loved the lemon:it was hot, passionate and loving ^_~ just the way I like it ;) keep writing!
| Title: Chaoter 6 Review
Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2003 17:41 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alright! Great going with the chapter, and the lemon. lol. *painfully unsticks face from scrunched-up 'sour' expression* Please update soon! ^~^
| Reviewed By: Amethyst (ish lazi dunt wanna sign in) On: December 27, 2003 17:08 CST
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So now they FINALLY make passionate love . . . ^^ It's all good.
| Title: Paradox Chapter 5
Reviewed By: GgBg [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2003 19:46 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am such a bubble head! I didn't realize that there were two chapters until after I completed the last review. Chapter 5 was of course fantastic! I wanted to see the reaction between Inu and Kouga over Kagome! I suppose it would have been way too OOC for Sess to have mellowed a bit but that's the way he is. Great job as usual Dragyn, keep it up!
| Title: Paradox Chapter 4
Reviewed By: GgBg [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2003 19:38 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi Dragyn_Fyre, Poor Inu, I felt so sorry for him! All of the time that he's been around he should have at least had a clue about what to say to Kagome! I mean he's spent lots of time with Sango and Miroku and some of what they do and how they interact with each other should have rubbed off on him. Oh well, it will work out in the end, you won't let our favorite hanyou suffer for long. I loved the lime scene, just giving us a teaser of what's to come humm? I'll be waiting for your next chapter with baited breath! Happy Holidays every one, be safe and full of good cheer!
| Title: Chapter 5 review
Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2003 11:19 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! another fantastic chapter! Angst from kagome and Inuyasha in one corner (i don't really like angst, but you're doing it wonderfully), and suspense from the new development with Naraku. You really make me go insane with wonder as to what the wish was. Please reveal it in the next chapter!! Also I have another suggestion. I feel mean giving it, because the story is so good, but i do have one. I think that Inuyasha should be a little more mautre. I mean, it's been 500 years, and i think he would mature a little bit by then. The insecurity with Kagome is a good thing, but for a 550 year old, he acts like he did 500 years ago. SEE? that sounds mean, and i don't mean it to be! Kudos with showing how lonley 500 years is. I got all misty eyed. lol. Kudos to you for making another great chapter! Update soon!! ^~^
| Reviewed By: Van Stolin [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2003 23:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this fic from the start of the first chapter to the latest one, I can't wait for you to get the next chapter up and you know what, I had an idea like this once, except that Kagome never fell into the well to begin with. I do have to point out somethings though. The only misspelling I have seen is Kaze no Kizu, you spelled it Kaze no Kizo. Another thing is Jaki. Jaki is evil energy and can be emited by anyone with an evil aura and is mostly assoiated with humans, youki is demonic energy and is only emited by youkai most of the time when the gang refers to the aura of youkai they use the term youki, just a little something to make it more like the show. Oh and if you need to know the spelling of any names or attacks from the show this is a good website. www.chibiexplosion.com/inuyasha I hope you will find it useful, well hope you get that next chapter up soon. Peace.
| Title: Chapter 4 Review
Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2003 04:55 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ahhhhh! You don't know how nice it is to see that one of your favorite stories has been updated just in time to save you from two hours of boredom!! And I never had a chapter dedicated to me!! =^_^= You are too nice! Anyway, I like the way you made Souta so brave! Kudos to him for standing up to Inuyasha being all feral! I love the Kawaii scenes too, but you are so mean getting all angsty like that at the end. You have got to clear that up! ^_^ Sorry if this review is getting lengthy, but I have one more thing. One suggestion: Not many people understand how LONG 500 years is. I mean, just take a while to sit back and imagine it. Think 50 years, and you think that's a long time, then think 500 years going by and you living through it all and waiting for something at the end of it. It seems like it'd never end. I think you should try to impress the idea of how long Inuyasha had to wait to the readers, because it seems like the years flew by like nothing. So, that's my review! Kudos for you and Keep up the good work!! Update soon!! ^~^
| Reviewed By: Laura-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2003 04:35 CST
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AAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH, sweet ^^ and sad ç_ç their first kiss ended in a very bad way.... well, I hope to read more soon ^_~
| Title: Paradox
Reviewed By: GgBg [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2003 03:20 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really really love your story, it's so good and I really appreciate the shout out in your A/N and for reviewing my fanfic. Since I've been talked into adding more to my story, I will return the favor! I felt bad for Inu in this chapter, I hope they get the chance to at least talk a little bit about their previous history and feelings in the next chapter. So what are you waiting for, hurry up and update already so that I can find out (ha ha).
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