| "BROTHERS' WAR" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: Dreg [Too Lazy To Sign On] On: February 15, 2004 12:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is truely a briliant idea, making a story out of InuYasha's past. But, I have noticed that two times, you used a very uncharacteristic line. InuYasha kept saying "WTF", but why dont you just write it in the full form? It makes him...wierd.
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Title: hmm...
Reviewed By: Chokoreeto Ame (nli) On: January 13, 2004 19:22 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't know, Sees can't be that bad can he? I thought that Inu was just going to "think" his brother attcked the mystery girl. And where was his guess for the chapter? Ah! Make the next one longer...but other than that it was good, keep going!
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Reviewed By: Gin Aibu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2004 01:30 CST
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This is really good! Are u sure this is ur first fanfic cause it sure soesn't seem like it. Nevermind. Anyway i believe that the answer to the riddle is one's heart, but its probably not the right answer, nonethless thats what i believe. Anyway keep on going, I can't wait for ur next chapter. Plz update this superb fanfic soom. -Ja Ne
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Reviewed By: Chokoreeto Ame(not logged in) On: December 31, 2003 15:06 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey~ It's going good but I think you just jumped to the romance, lead up to it more! As for the girl I think it should be Kikyou because then you could explain their relationship in the anime. In terms of the riddle, I think the answer could be either love or nothing, but those are a bit to obvious, huh?
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Reviewed By: Mek Mek [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2003 15:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey Grifer, this is really good. I wanna know her name though! I want her to be someone we know, not someone new that's made up, unless she is related to someone we know or something. I don't know, just make it good. Oh yeah, and I have no idea what the answer to the riddle is. Good job, I wanna keep reading.
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Title: YAY!
Reviewed By: Chokoreeto Ame [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2003 23:04 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey cuz~ This is REALLY good for your first fanfic. Keep it up, I know you won't agree but...you should do a Kagome/Sess together!...My sister says you should do Kikyo/Myoga...right well I'll be looking for more postings soon!
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