| "Please take me home" Reviews/Comments [ 14 ] |
Reviewed By: ang3lic_pl4ya [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2004 19:57 CDT
Comment/Review:
UPDATE DUDE!!! I NEED IT TO BE UPDATED!!!!!!!!!!!!..!!..!!! GHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA COMMON YOU FUCKIN NEED TO UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! is it okay if i add you to mah hotmail account?
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Reviewed By: MIztikal_Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 18, 2004 01:11 CST
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te he thats a great story so far. though inuyasha is a little perverted.. but nothing but a complete giggle fest update soon Krystal.
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Reviewed By: Faye273 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2004 19:28 CST
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huh? what the hell happened to Inu's lovely, sad wish "it will only be used to grant her imortality so that we will be together forever...?" He gave up on that kinda quick huh?
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Reviewed By: lover boy On: January 30, 2004 19:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love your fic!!plz update soon. 73s
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Reviewed By: Fire_Child [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2004 11:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey great fic now im going to have to keep checking up on this fic. Hey i have a challange for ya write a demon diary fic. well update soon. Raya
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Title: looking good ^_^
Reviewed By: Inugome Kayasha (not signed on) On: January 19, 2004 15:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kool im luvin ya fan fic so far so kool Keep up the good work I cant wait to see what is to come in this story....well n e wayz update soon and you be sure to stay tuned to when readers review!!! P.S. Look out for my upcomming fan fic the search for Kagome!
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Reviewed By: Fountail Girl On: January 16, 2004 20:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really loved your fic keep writing!!!!
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Reviewed By: Blazewing On: January 14, 2004 00:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not too bad, so far. I'm hoping that you're going to add some interesting twists to an otherwise common plot line. ^_^ On the subject of your spelling (I saw your response to another reviewer), it's not that your spelling is incorrect - it's that the word itself is incorrect (i.e 'scowling' vs. 'scolding' near the end of ch. 3). It doesn't make much sense for Sango to be scowling at Miroku, when the context of the paragraph infers that she's saying something to him, not glaring silently - see? Spell check is all well and good, but the wrong word doesn't work any better than a misspelled word, even if the word itself is spelled right. A trick I use when I don't have a handy beta (proof) reader is to leave the story alone for a day, then come back and read it ALOUD. You'd be surprised at just how many mistakes you'll find this way, mistakes that you just wouldn't have otherwise seen. And not only will you catch spelling and grammar mistakes by reading what you've written aloud, but you'll also get a good sense of how well it flows. Tricks like this can mean the difference between a good fic and a great one. Keep up the good work and don't give up. I look forward to those plot twists! ^_^
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Title: Luvin it!!
Reviewed By: Ryu Sachiko Sama [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2004 16:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
K dudette... This was wonderful!! The frist 2 chapters were a bit short... but this one made up for it... I loved the romance.... =P
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Reviewed By: meera [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2004 13:40 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please continue the fic! it's really good:D
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Reviewed By: Faye273 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2004 00:47 CST
Comment/Review:
Good start, keep going. Leaves plenty of room for creative changes
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Reviewed By: Spectre97 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2004 17:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is to big of a cliffhanger!!! Keep up with the good work 'cause I want to know where this stort leads.
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Reviewed By: Nikszajow On: January 08, 2004 23:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The style of writing is pretty good, but not as good as it could be. You should go over it, too because I noticed misspelled words and maybe 1 or 2 words that made no sence at all. I think it was really good though and I think you should write more as soon as posssible because I enjoy your InuYasha stories. Write more for me, Nikki
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Title: sup
Reviewed By: Chanel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2004 19:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awww, it's such a good beginning! How sad that Sango lost both her brother and Kirara. Please continue!
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