| "Mai na Neka" Reviews/Comments [ 24 ] |
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Reviewed By: Aqua Aneko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2006 22:21 CDT
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The idea behind this story is really quite good but no offence it's more of a draft then a final piece. You need to do some rewriting because this story has a lot of potential but you really need to expand on some of your ideas and add more details to the story such as where is Rin and Jaken (Why aren't they with Seshoumaru), why was Kagome leaving, did she and Inuyasha have their usual fight before she did (if so why wasn't she upset went she entered in on the scene), why was Kagome hiding the fact she was a kami, you need to touch on Kikyou and Kagome's relation both in the stance of whether or not they like eachother and in whether Kagome is her reincarnation, if Kagome is a kami why is the rest of her family human, ect. ect. You also need to spend some more time on the development of Kagome and Sesshomaru's feelings for eachother (it's not likely they would go from trying to kill eachother to making out that fast) and on Kagome realizing that her feelings for Inuyasha are platonic and not romantic because it's not likely she would recover from being rejected by the one she thinks she loves and realize she doesn't love him like that so quickly. This story has a lot of potential give it a little work and it will amaze you how much better it gets.
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Reviewed By: MMMidget On: July 05, 2005 13:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
You need better grammar and longer stories. The plot is really neat, but the chapters are WAY too short. Try to re-edit your stories so that they flow better.
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Reviewed By: Youkos_Rose [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2004 18:48 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey cool fic! This IS going to be a Sessho/Kagome fic right? That would be sooo cool! Great work and please update soon. Ja ne
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Reviewed By: Cresent Moon22000 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2004 16:22 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
OMG PLz UPDATE ASAP ok This IS REALLY REALLY GOOOOD
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Title: Taeniaea
Reviewed By: Taeniaea [MediaMiner Member] On: February 16, 2004 20:25 CST
Comment/Review:
I love it !!
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Reviewed By: trihn On: February 14, 2004 17:28 CST
Comment/Review:
i love it!
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Reviewed By: dark huntress On: February 14, 2004 01:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's really great. Update soon.
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Reviewed By: Ally J On: February 13, 2004 21:02 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great fanfic,please do more chapters soon!!!!
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Title: Thanks
Reviewed By: StarGazer55 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2004 19:59 CST
Comment/Review:
thanks again for reviewing
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Reviewed By: Cresent Moon22000(not loged in) On: February 13, 2004 19:49 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Kool PLz update ASAP ok
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Reviewed By: 12blue12(logged off) On: February 13, 2004 19:39 CST
Comment/Review:
well nice chsppie but kinda short so i hop[e more come soon cya!
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Reviewed By: Lady Kaela [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2004 17:35 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it. please update soon.
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Reviewed By: trihn On: February 06, 2004 01:54 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love the fic!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: trihn On: February 06, 2004 01:54 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love the fic!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: 12blue12(logged off) On: February 05, 2004 15:33 CST
Comment/Review:
coolie update cant wait for the next update cya!
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