| "Lost Purpose" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] |
Reviewed By: moimoi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2005 16:52 CST
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i've read this fic several times before, it is in fact on my favourites list and has been for some time. thus i was disappointed in myself for not leaving a review before. I love this fic and its sequel and hope that you continue to write (especially in WK)
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Reviewed By: Flamingolo [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2005 13:41 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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My, you did an excellent job with this ficcie, very emotionally moving and engrossing. A few errors concerning grammar and spelling, but even those didn't manage to dissolve the quality of the fic. It helped that you gave a little warning in the beginning, and I can assure you that your English is fairly impressive, considering your stated unfamiliarity. This was an extremely enjoyable ficcie that sucked me in and just wouldn't let go until I had read the whole thing. Nice job with character motivation expressed through dialog, very subtle without being vague. I especially liked the unpredictability of the plot, I can honestly say that I didn't have a clue how it would end. Great job!
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Reviewed By: Theresa On: July 03, 2004 18:18 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent. Kudos.
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Reviewed By: deunank On: March 22, 2004 09:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Despite occasional grammar and spelling mistakes, that was awesome! Original and well written. If you're still looking for people proofread, I'd be happy to do it. What a great story! And I'm glad you wrote 10 chapters. I loved the Yohji angst. The portrayal of Yohji and Aya was very convincing. Specially Aya lying to Yohji when he meets him in the park. So good!
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Reviewed By: Flicker [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2004 18:57 CST
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I think I'm going to cry! ;_; Poor Yohji seems so sad and broken...you're going to fix them for real, right? Right? Please, please, keep this going, cuz you're doing a great job!
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Reviewed By: NekoHope [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2004 07:04 CST
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Very nice! I enjoyed reading it, it was a nice change fo pace for me. ^^
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Reviewed By: AmberKatzchen On: January 24, 2004 21:53 CST
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Just want to tell you that you've done a good job! I like how you write about the feeling of Yohji after Ran leaving him. It's so sad and hurting and you make the action of Yohji committing suicide reasonable and convincing. Ran is a bastard!! Why he always shatters Yohji's heart? Can't he do better and treasures it at least one time? Hope he finally comes to his mind and makes things right again. Oh, and please continue your fic!
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Title: Woo
Reviewed By: Tygrrlyli578 On: January 22, 2004 13:16 CST
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Coolness! Mediaminer has finaly deigned it acceptable for me to write a review. It's been denying me this for a while, but now!! Anyway, this story is very emotionally charged, intriguing and cool! Happy day!
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Reviewed By: vv On: January 22, 2004 02:51 CST
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In fic after fic Ran's always making the same stupid mistake. The guy has problems. Unfortunately, he shares them.
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Reviewed By: Trinity Bennett [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2004 19:56 CST
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Wow, that was just.. I wasn't expecting you to add to it. I loved it. You have some minor grammar problems and such, but don't we all? Yohji seems to be so sad to me here. You can really feel that he has had his heart broken for the last time and has given up. Aya is being.. well, Aya too. Nice characterization. Brilliant story, you had me in tears.
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Reviewed By: fadedLily [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2004 17:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
;_; I think I'm going to cry. God, this story is so sad and so beautiful. I love just how broken Yohji is after Ran leaves him; glad you portrayed it that way. While Yohji may have survived the loss of Asuka, it makes sense that his heart wouldn't be able to handle the same thing again. There are some grammatical errors in here, but nothing that proofreading wouldn't cure. Some phrases that sound a little odd. Still, you get your point across. I hope you continue this fic.
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