| "A Whispered Connection" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Title: good job
Reviewed By: Hikaru-RoseRed [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2006 22:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
very nice, i liked it. I agree with Fade9wayz. no need for the threesome the dude hasnt a clue when it comes to anything not military just like fade said. but i liked it. all but 1 10's. 9 in spelling becuase i caught a few miss spelled words. I say you should completely ignore darkwolvesoverlord, if they were enough of a dumb ass not to read the warning their opion counts for shit. anyway good job keep it up
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Title: this is distgusting...
Reviewed By: darkwolvesoverlord [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2005 18:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
your sick... tessa and Kaname?! thats just gross....
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Reviewed By: Fade9wayz [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2004 04:02 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Nah, no need for the threesome. Sometimes, a short, efficient fic is best, and I think you stopped it at the right time, considering Sagara's usual cluelessness about anything non-military related... I think you did a good job for a first hentai fic ^^ You could post it at shoujoai.com
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Reviewed By: Kya77 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2004 19:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
The only suggestion I have is to have made it longer and at the end where Sousuke comes home turn it into a threesome. Not to bad for your first lemon.
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