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| "Behind Blue Eyes" Reviews/Comments [ 34 ] | | Pages (3): [ 1 2 3 > » ] | Reviewed By: tarigarma454 On: July 23, 2004 21:19 CDT
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I love the history you're a excellent writer, I hope you keep writing like that
| Reviewed By: Youkai Girl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2004 10:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow this fic was amazing! You handled the steady decline of Heero's mental status so well, and made me love Nora even though she was an OC. Thank you for writing this beautiful fic, please keep up the good work on your next project!
| Reviewed By: Pia Bartolini [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2004 02:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a fantastic story, overall. So wonderfully heartfelt and articulated. Granted, I found the ending quite abrupt, it felt awkward.....and really, in my opinion, calls for a sequel (I don't know, you sneaky authors....you probably left it open ended on purpose). The spelling was a bit off, at times, with a few homynim swaps here and there, but overall, quite wonderful. I simply can't wait for more, should you choose to write it! If you would like any deeper feedback, or just generally want to chat, email me at kurea_13@hotmail.com Ja ne!
| Reviewed By: priscilla *doesn't make a habit of squealin'* On: July 10, 2004 19:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*squeals in delight and glomps Naomi* Thank you, ya really didn't have to make that dedication but hopefully those two little words will be enough to express my gratitude. (^_^) Wow, I thought it was a beautiful ending and Duo got a little extra TLC from his Hee-baby. Thinking back, I can't believe that its only been six chapters... six incredibably, emotion twisting, heart reaming, tear jurking, well-writen (a few typos *runs and hides*) chapters and I feel... what is it, well heero said it closure for Heero's situation and hope that Duo's will be worked out along the way. *snickers* man all the times Duo turned to goo *snickers* MAN is he adorable even as a boneless mass of hair and ... O'o ...uh ok lets not think of it that way...goo is much better *shivers*. This chapter was well worth the wait and welcome back I'm glad that you enjoyed you vacation. Some time away from things always helps bring a better perspective to any give task (shoot i hope that makes sense I trying to avoid using 'things' again). Thank you for you commitment and explaining a few things to me earlier on. (^_-)
| Reviewed By: Tyi Yuy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2004 22:20 CDT
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Very gooood u have a few lyrics in your writing lol!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! continue!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: Tyi Yuy [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2004 19:43 CDT
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very interesting and veeeeeeeeeeeerrrrrrrrryyyyyyy long but still very good!!!!!! is Nora heero's mother but they can't remember??????????????????????????????????? continue!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2004 20:43 CDT
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Yet another tear-jerker chapter. You must take great pleasure in tormenting us poor readers, ne? Either that or you have lots of stock in Kleenex... I loved Heero's reaction when he finally realized he had a mother. In all the sadness, he actually had someone that could fill in so many of the gaps of who he was. Is he going to find out when his birthday is? Bless Duo's heart - he's being so supportive through all of this. He's wearing himself out. Their little retreat was perfect. Just what they both needed, but what are they going to return to when they get back to the city?
| Reviewed By: black beauty On: April 22, 2004 21:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! You are so talented. One minute you have me crying out of sadness, the next I'm crying happy tears. The way you depict your character's emotions is facinating. BTW, I love the fact that in between the sad part there are some joyful moments between Duo and Heero. Keep up the amazing job and thanks for preparing us for Nora's eventual death, instead of giving us one huge shock!
| Title: me again (sorry this is a lot longer then i expected)
Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2004 08:59 CDT
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am I a nusiance? wow, that was a great chapter. I wanted to declare.... I LOVE YOU DUO! he's incredible, all that he's doing for Heero. So much pressure and strain on Duo, so much I hope he doesn't crack because I feel this will get harder the closer it is for Nora to go. mmmh, when he began to cry I was hoping that Heero would wake and comfort him, let him know that they could take turns be strong, but I realize just how much Heero needs Duo to be the strong one right now. I was so relieved that Nora wasn't actually gone. I wished Nora asked to Duo to touch his face.... but I fear that he would have started crying if they did more than hold hands. wow this is such a wonderful story, I can't wait to read the next chapter. what a beautiful way to end this chapter too... the two lovers falling asleep in sated bliss. My question though, concerns a comments Duo said earlier... when Nora had asked him who was the dominant in their relationship. Hmmm could this story possibly be 1x2x1? that way they're not just eguals in the sense of their intelligence, love making, etc. but equal in whose is uke and seme in their relationship... Somehow I get the feeling that they wouldn't mind switching, but at the moment uke seems to be Heero's role and is very much reflected in these past chapters in the story because he's receiveing a great deal from Duo: love, compassion, support, understanding, patience, and undivided attention (just to name a few). And ch.4, Heero did a little more giving. I hope that this increases in the story, because I feel Duo needs to be on the receiving end too. Heero is so lucky, thank you for such an emotion rivetted, heart touching story. please feel free to email me if you wish to respond to my comments.
| Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2004 05:46 CDT
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Forgive me Naomi-san, I meant to say ch.2, I knew it I knew it!! Nora is Heero's mom! Man the depth of emotion you convey in this story... I don't what to say, Ch.4 was so sad... I'm so happy that Duo is there to Help Heero now that Nora is gone. Why did she have to be so stubborn! They could have tried to get her to a doctor to see what could be done to help her. sigh...onward to Ch.5 (^_^)
| Reviewed By: ep-chan On: April 19, 2004 05:42 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice story. It's packed with emotion and hmm suspense!
| Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2004 07:20 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
waaa... i'm not nearly caught up to every1 else (ch7), but what a story!! Thank you Naomi for sharing you are quite a writer! I'm so glad heero and duo are together.
| Reviewed By: black beauty On: March 21, 2004 00:13 CST
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NOOOOOOOOOOOO! This is so unfair. I can't hardly see the letter on the keyboard cuz my eyes are still tearing up. How could you kill Nora?! After all that he went through Heero deserved to know she was his mother while they were both alive. Is there going be a next chapter. Will Heero find out after her death that she was his mother? Oh the last chapter was so heart wrenching sad.
| Title: Woah...
Reviewed By: Maxwells Demon [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2004 16:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. I read "Running Out of Tomorrows" and I fell in love with your work. So when I was notified about "Behind Blue Eyes", I dug in. I think you've made me realize that no matter how much I enjoy Wufei and Duo together, Duo and Heero will always be my favorite couple. And your ideas for this fic are awesome and you broke my heart with Nora's death. What happenes now? Keep writing!
| Reviewed By: Princess2000204 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2004 22:42 CST
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I really like this story and I like its originality of it! Pleae don't let Nora die!!! you just can't because that would be just mean!!! Are you going to have it where Heero is really Nora's long lost supposed dead son? Please update REALLY REALLY soon!!!
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