| "What is Mine" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: JB On: December 16, 2006 12:35 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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It's a fairly well written story with only a few grammatical mistakes that didn't necessarily detract from the story. Being a Weiss fan myself, I was rather disappointed with the ending. But, I'm the type that prefers the good guys win and happily ever-after. Perhaps you'll write a sequel one day that has Weiss winning in the end. =D You might consider putting a note at the beginning of the story to indicate that the story does not have a happy ending for Weiss, to prepare/warn the Weiss fans in advance (and maybe excite the Schwartz fans from the beginning, lol). As a constructive critique to help you with your writing/plotting, there was one thing I saw as being a bit over the top in your story. It had to do with Schuldig's powers. It seemed that if he was a powerful enough telepath to basically shut down Aya's brain & put Aya in a coma despite himself being nearly mortally wounded and "at his limit" from the fight scene, then Weiss would have never been the challenge to Schwartz that they were made out to be. In a fully healthy & rested state, Schuldig could have just fried their brains or shut them all down long ago. That part seemed a bit out there in my opinion. Anyway, good luck with future projects. =)
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Reviewed By: moimoi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2005 15:32 CDT
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i've been enjoying this fic greatly can't wait for an update...(hint hint)
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Reviewed By: Rentania On: January 12, 2005 12:01 CST
Comment/Review:
This is soooooooo freaking interesting! Nice job with Crawford and Shu, very IC actions for them. I'm lovin this fic, you must update soon!
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Reviewed By: elisabeth On: November 06, 2004 04:07 CST
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NO a clif hanger. Poor Aya. Love this story.
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Reviewed By: boowoman [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2004 09:25 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is great! I love it! I only hope Schuldih won't die, but it looks kind of bad for him... ;_; Please don't kill Schuldig *puppy eyes*
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Reviewed By: Millennia On: April 30, 2004 23:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Hey I love ur fic!! and please please please can it have a shu/ran ending??? (or at least a not dead shu ending?) shu's died in so many fics and yohji *always* gets ran... sry i have to make my plea- but either way i'm looking forward to seeing the actual outcome :)
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Title: Wowser!
Reviewed By: tima [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2004 18:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wowiee! What an awesome fanfic! I love the angst thats practically overflowing in this fic! It makes me so happy I could cry. "Grins" I sound demented dont I? Anyway, awesome, awesome, awesome fic! Definetly going on my favorites. P.S Can you recommend any good WK fanfics? My email is timarach2001@yahoo.com
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Reviewed By: Fata Morgana1 On: February 12, 2004 04:03 CST
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Though I prefer Crawford/Ran pairing. I dont mind once in a while reading Schu/Ran pairing. So.. just go ahead and keep on writing and maybe one day you could write a romance/angst fic of my fav. couple *grin*
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Reviewed By: kender On: February 10, 2004 05:16 CST
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keep writing. i like it.
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