| "Decisions of the Heart" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Title: overall review
Reviewed By: SironaMorpher On: April 09, 2005 20:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great fic!I love your style of writing,your creativness,and overall enjoy reading your stories.One thing though... WHERE'S THE SEQUEL TO THIS STORY?!?!?!?!
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Title: review of chapter 13
Reviewed By: SironaMorpher On: April 09, 2005 19:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
In chapter 13 when Kagome is aiming at Inuyasha's heart and the stinging stops, this is what is said:Kag:(drops bow & arrow & falls to knees)I have...no control...over my body.I can't stop.Run!Before it's too late...before I...Inu:That's enough!I don't wanna hear it!I'm sicka you an' everybody else telling me to run!I'm not running!Not without you.I won't leave you behind.Kag:(mind taken over picks up bow and aims again)No(tears)no!(lets go of arrow)NOOOOOOOOO!(starts running to Inu crying)Inu:Kagome...(arrow hits Inu)Ungh!Other than that great style,spelling,creativity,and overall excellency!
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Title: review
Reviewed By: SironaMorpher On: April 09, 2005 19:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
In chapter 13 when Kagome is aiming at Inuyasha's heart and the stinging stops, this is what is said:Kag:(drops bow & arrow & falls to knees)I have...no control...over my body.I can't stop.Run!Before it's too late...before I...Inu:That's enough!I don't wanna hear it!I'm sicka you an' everybody else telling me to run!I'm not running!Not without you.I won't leave you behind.Kag:(mind taken over picks up bow and aims again)No(tears)no!(lets go of arrow)NOOOOOOOOO!(starts running to Inu crying)Inu:Kagome...(arrow hits Inu)Ungh!Other than that great style,spelling,creativity,and overall excellency!
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Title: powerful beginings
Reviewed By: antisocial mint [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2004 00:07 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
i thought the begining was GREAT! but i think she shoulda forgot about him, i mean how could he be so cruel?? she just forgave him so easily after that!?! that kinda bothered me sorry
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