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| "Unwilling Sleep" Reviews/Comments [ 47 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Reviewed By: Hatsbox On: May 18, 2004 20:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
For the love of GOD, update!! It's so good, it makes me want to weep with happiness.
| Title: Sweet Torture
Reviewed By: Jexia [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2004 16:22 CDT
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Gah, so much wonderful writing, psychological insight, danger, worry and hilarity. An emotional but exhilarating emotional roller coaster for me and how sweet when Leon finally blurts it out. I'm still smiling. God, that was great!
| Title: Relief
Reviewed By: Jexia [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2004 13:22 CDT
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I've been quite worried about you, hoping that you were well. This chapter has quite delicate content and what you did with it would have an undeniable effect on whatever else comes next in your story, so it was certainly worth taking the time to get it right, and to my way of thinking, for what that is worth, it is. Of the various scenes, I think my favorite is the one in which Chris is riding on Leon's shoulders and they meet Zhou, and Leon gives his brother the affection squeeze on the knees and says the phrase that makes his heart so joyful. That was a beautiful scene and so appropriate to the title. It brought back memories of my childhood, when I rode on my daddy's shoulders. I had forgotten and it was very nice to be reminded how much care and love that the couple who raised me, put into my life. It is a beautiful thing to see Leon and D stepping into the larger role of modeling love despite the social difficulties inherent in a homosexual union. This chapter shows a deepening of the relationship between D and Leon as they reach out to others as a couple. The party with Chuck and Ranjeet and Zhou's continued presence at the antique shop seem likely to provide material for future chapters and I am looking forward to them. I am enjoying the inclusion of your original characters in the story very much. I do love what D had to say about television although reading fan fiction can be every bit as addictive, especially with a fiction as wonderful as yours. Thank you for the update.
| Reviewed By: lituska_silvermoon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2004 07:04 CDT
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I really really like reading this fic ^_^ you have a very nice style of writing. Cant wait to read the continuation
| Reviewed By: Jexia [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2004 19:10 CDT
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I reviewed this chapter over at FF.net. I hate embarrassing you, but don't seem to be able to avoid it. I nominated this story for the featured fiction section. If the powers that be read it, I'd have to say, it ought to be a lock. This is one of the few fictions I've read that I never want to end, hard as that would be on you. Looking forward, as usual, to the next chapter.
| Reviewed By: Muku muku On: April 05, 2004 14:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THE BEST PSH FIC EVER! EVER!!!!!
| Reviewed By: sunandshadow [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2004 23:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! Hurray! What a lovely sex scene. ^_^ I'm happy now. Ooh, new thought - are Leon's new police colleagues going to find out he has a boyfriend? It would be a real mindbender for Leon if people started thinking of him as "the gay new guy" or "that gay detective". Snrk. I really love the way you write Leon's pov by the way, you really capture how he's rough and a bit too macho, yet somehow loveable anyway. ^_^ It would be funny if, when D started cleaning the antique shop, he got overwhelmed by the sheer amount of dust and grime. So he would think, "This means war!" and clean twice as hard, and at the end he would be frazzled, victorious, and probably filthy himself... so then he goes home, and Leon's startled, then amused by the concept of a filthy D, and they end up in the shower together... Mmmm ^_^ Okay, I'll stop letting myself get carried away now. But this story absolutely rocks, and I'll be awaiting your next update bouncing in eagerness. ^_^
| Reviewed By: sunandshadow [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2004 23:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! Hurray! What a lovely sex scene. ^_^ I'm happy now. Ooh, new thought - are Leon's new police colleagues going to find out he has a boyfriend? It would be a real mindbender for Leon if people started thinking of him as "the gay new guy" or "that gay detective". Snrk. I really love the way you write Leon's pov by the way, you really capture how he's rough and a bit too macho, yet somehow loveable anyway. ^_^ It would be funny if, when D started cleaning the antique shop, he got overwhelmed by the sheer amount of dust and grime. So he would think, "This means war!" and clean twice as hard, and at the end he would be frazzled, victorious, and probably filthy himself... so then he goes home, and Leon's startled, then amused by the concept of a filthy D, and they end up in the shower together... Mmmm ^_^ Okay, I'll stop letting myself get carried away now. But this story absolutely rocks, and I'll be awaiting your next update bouncing in eagerness. ^_^
| Reviewed By: sunandshadow [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2004 23:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! Hurray! What a lovely sex scene. ^_^ I'm happy now. Ooh, new thought - are Leon's new police colleagues going to find out he has a boyfriend? It would be a real mindbender for Leon if people started thinking of him as "the gay new guy" or "that gay detective". Snrk. I really love the way you write Leon's pov by the way, you really capture how he's rough and a bit too macho, yet somehow loveable anyway. ^_^ It would be funny if, when D started cleaning the antique shop, he got overwhelmed by the sheer amount of dust and grime. So he would think, "This means war!" and clean twice as hard, and at the end he would be frazzled, victorious, and probably filthy himself... so then he goes home, and Leon's startled, then amused by the concept of a filthy D, and they end up in the shower together... Mmmm ^_^ Okay, I'll stop letting myself get carried away now. But this story absolutely rocks, and I'll be awaiting your next update bouncing in eagerness. ^_^
| Reviewed By: onichan01 On: March 10, 2004 20:39 CST
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*purrs* ooo, that was sooo good...and incredibly sweet. ^^ i look forward to the next chapter, whenever you get around to posting it. keep up the excellent work! (^_^)b
| Title: "It's so good"
Reviewed By: Jexia [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2004 19:18 CST
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Impossible to wax eloquent. I've been reduced to a puddle of sated mush. So much need, affection, reverence--loved it. Thanks for the Wednesday pick-me-up. No worries about the delay of your next update. It's obvious that you gave your all to this chapter. Catch up with real life for a while. Thank you.
| Reviewed By: onichan On: March 04, 2004 15:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
dear god, this story is amazing. the best PSOH fic i've seen on the entire site. it's just...incredible, i don't know how to describe it. i'm totally hooked on this story and i can't wait to see more.
| Title: Wonderful Wednesday
Reviewed By: Jexia [MediaMiner Member] On: March 04, 2004 00:19 CST
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Will you get bored with me telling you how much I'm enjoying this? What a lift it gave to my day. I was delighted with the length of your chapter and every now and then I would look at the scroll bar on the right to see how far down it had traveled during my reading and sigh happily knowing there was more to come. I remember thinking how gracefully you changed your narrative point of view between Leon and D. The description of D's trip to the tailor and his triumph at the antique shop were gems. I love how Leon's jealousy helps define the degree of his passion for Dee. I appreciate his concern for D's physical well-being. The unrelieved sexual tension in the chapter is very well done and so appropriate to the situation. The dream confrontation between D and Sofu was intense and beautiful. I love how D defended Leon and his choice to become mortal, to become human. The love of D and Leon for each other is such a leap of faith that however clumsy their coupling might be at this point, it is poignant. I pity Sofu for his blindness and prejudice.
| Reviewed By: Azrale On: March 01, 2004 18:32 CST
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Wow and...Wow....this is an amazing story. Please write more. ^_^
| Reviewed By: Omni-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2004 02:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, it's currently 3:30AM where I am now. I have to wake up in a couple of hours for college. But, I could not stop reading this fic once I started. And I want more. Dear god, you have got me hooked! This is wonderful! More than wonderful!!! I hope to see the next chapter of it up soon. You certainly have a great talent.
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