| "Words of Love Not Spoken" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: roxworld [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2004 21:42 CDT
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I will gve you the good stuff first: I liked the story line, the plot looks like it is going to be interesting and I can't wait until you up-date. Also you portray Sakiki's emotions very well. Bad: You need to work on your grammer (everyone does) and you need to let the story flow a little more. I liked the song/poem but you didn't describe some scenes very well. You should take things a little slower in my opinion and let the story be a lot more discriptive. Belive me, the more details the better. That is all I have to say, and over all I liked your fic. Keep on writing and you will become better each time. So I am sorry if this review hurt you but I like to give out constructive critism so you can write better next time. May your muse never run away, roxworld
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Reviewed By: Figg Nootun On: April 16, 2004 16:54 CDT
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I am a huge fan of WHR and Sakiki is one of my favorite characters. Keep up the good work and update soon. I want to read more, MORE I TELL YOU!
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Reviewed By: Fig Nootun On: April 16, 2004 16:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am a huge fan of WHR and Sakiki is one of my favorite characters. Keep up the good work and update soon.
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Reviewed By: wired_syirm On: March 13, 2004 02:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed this, but the one thing I concentrate heavily on is the dialogue. It has to sound natural and flow, and for the most part it did, just some minor stuff here and there. You've succeeded in inducing a warm and fuzzy feeling in me :)!
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Title: Words of Love Not spoken
Reviewed By: Hallo, Arella On: March 10, 2004 08:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
THere were a few lurches in the writing. If you go back adn look closely, you'll see them. Otherwise, this was a wonderful story. I hope you write a second passage soon. What was that song/poem? I really liked it.
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Reviewed By: Jewely On: March 09, 2004 20:16 CST
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MORE MORE MORE :P
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Title: yuyu_fan
Reviewed By: yuyu_fan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2004 20:58 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it, right more soon
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Reviewed By: GambitGirl2008 On: March 04, 2004 19:32 CST
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well this was intersting. ~GambitGirl2008~
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Reviewed By: CML On: March 04, 2004 16:12 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love it, you need to update very soon!!
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