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| "A Study In Contrasts" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: shivalatina [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2006 14:21 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
You know what I like.
| Reviewed By: madame shannon On: May 29, 2004 20:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow....that's all i can really say it was beautifully done here is a rose 4 you @----^---
| Reviewed By: Clumsy Kitten (2 lzy 2 sgn in) On: April 24, 2004 08:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It ROX! I WAS READING it WHILE LISTENING TO YEAH BY USHER & CO! DROOLWORTHY!
| Reviewed By: Clumsy Kitten (2 lzy 2 sgn in) On: April 24, 2004 08:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It ROX! I WAS READING WHILE LISTENING TO YEAH BY USHER & CO! DROOLWORTHY!
| Title: mmm....ahhh
Reviewed By: l_n (not signed in) On: March 06, 2004 06:10 CST
Comment/Review:
//Gohan loves the breathless gasp of his name, and the way Trunks snarls out the Go part, like it's an order, almost makes this over too quick. Gohan wants Trunks to come and he wants this to last forever. Hates the brink of orgasm, but loves the feeling so badly he holds off, torturing himself and Trunks with the exquisite pain, tasting the fine edge of eternity in the musky scent that hangs heavy around them. The way he can still taste Trunks on his tongue.// your writing is poetic, but you don't lapse into pretense. Every word has a purpose. I am in awe. That's real writing. That's what it's all about. I swear you are a muse, damnit. It's poetry, not even "narrative." It's freakin poetry. The theme suits them so well, becaus ethey are so diferent on just about every level. Drives home how they are a case of "opposites attract." (at least when it comes to gohan/chibi trunks!) Wher eto even begin with your fic... It's so packed. Meaning in everything. The way you describe GOhan as scared and Trunks as smooth- their lives were so different. The way Trunks is an uke, but definetly not submissive- I LOVE THAT! A strong uke makes/ breaks a yaoi lemon. (imho) and your trunks is *always* strong. But this one- dmn. You made him practically ORDER gohan to "GO!" Damn. that was so hot.... I love the references to talking dirty, being perverted...mmm.... but the best thing about your erotic writing is how you use emotion and observation over pinning down every single detail, to paint a picture. the composition is so strong and erotic. It makes me go GAAAA. I loved it when you posted it on LJ. I love it now. Thank goodness you've got it up where even more people can see. You are a freakin muse, man!
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