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| "The Greatest Gift" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: Trinity-sama On: January 24, 2005 23:28 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Comment/Review:
You imply in the rest of the fic that Kyo has his cat instincts and reflexes, so he definitely should be animalistic. as for the rest, i think tohru should be shy but not to the point that she's acting like a virgin. just 'oh god, this is kyo i'm sleeping with' type of shy. as for kyo being a virgin, it would make sense, but he shouldn't be totally clueless, seeing as how he worked in a smut shop. and if he is a virgin, he should use his wonderful kitty instincts. ^_^ so those are my opinions, please continue this fic, its really cute, i'm enjoying it and am eager to read more!
| Title: ...
Reviewed By: Arashi Person Again On: April 01, 2004 18:50 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
*** Ten out of ten, you stupid clicky thingy!! ..Heh, sorry ^^. Damn mouse...
| Title: *nods*
Reviewed By: Fellow Lemon Writer Arashi On: April 01, 2004 18:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*nods* Hm...Oh, I just love your story ^__^. I'm currently in the process of writing my own Fruits Basket fanfic, but I have writer's block, so instead I shall help you ^^. Okay...I would think that Kyo would not be virgin, that seems better. I also picture Kyo being on top most of the time, not that they can roll around much considering that they're on the roof ^^. I also don't think that Toru should be TOO shy, not just lying there, but her hands racing and such. And perhaps Kyo can sit up with Toru on his lap first before falling back to lie over her. *nods, finger tapping her chin in contempulation* I definately don't vote for them both being shy though. I like to picture Kyo as...well...somewhat masterful, if you know what I mean ^^. He's never exactly been one for shyness, at least in most aspects. Though I think he should be somewhat calm during the process, it would make sense for him to be holding back some of his passion so as not to hurt her or anything. *nods again* The first time, no toys or doggy style. Doggy style would be more of a second time thing, and toys are sort of a third or fourth time thing, so that they are more comfortable with each other and the thought of toys. They would have to have been together, or been having their little affair or whatever for a while before toys could come in. Yup yup. Heh....hope that I've been at least some help ^^. Good luck writing, and update soon!! ^__^
| Title: Tsuyoku
Reviewed By: Tsuyoku [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2004 16:58 CST
Comment/Review:
It's a very interesting fic, I like it 'cause I've never seen any plot like it and it is ver original! Complements. And if you want to keep up the lemon then go for it. I think that this is a great fic, keep up the good work!
| Title: Mackers
Reviewed By: Punky Monkey [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2004 19:02 CST
Comment/Review:
Good job.
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