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| "Pink Ribbons" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Title: Mating!?
Reviewed By: Gatomon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 16, 2004 15:54 CDT
Comment/Review:
M-mating? Oh my... this fanfic is rated PG. Aming, sure, it will really blow everyone's eyes out if this was really a rated NC-17 fanfic. Uh... Did I say anything about killing Bijou? If I did, I'm sorry. Bijou needs Hamtaro, after all! ^_^ Yeah, I'll do something interesting for the next chappy, but it will come real soon! Sayonora, everyone! ^_^
| Title: Interesting....
Reviewed By: Samuraiofsteel [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2004 23:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice idea. I don't think I've read a fanfic yet that has Hamtaro finding his mother. 10 for creartivity. Please use spellcheck or something. It's killing your story. Need a lil more romance in the next chapter, though. There was none in this one. Have the Hams have a dance or something. Or play spin the bottle! Or acorn. That should get some couples together pretty quick, as well as have some interesting side results....Please update soon! Later....
| Title: Don't Kill Bijou!
Reviewed By: Samuraiofsteel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2004 23:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aside from the fact that it was a little short, this was a pretty interesting chapter. I like the way you made the plot thicken with Boss. I did find two mistakes, however. First, you really gotta work on the spelling. Some sentences aren't even complete. I understand what you are trying to say when you write them, but it makes it less enjoyable to try and figure it out. Secondly, you should make Hamtaro less clueless about his love with Bijou. He can still be clueless a little because that is his character, but when he didn't understand about not wering Boss's gift and her having to kiss him to make him understand, that's a little too much. One last thing: DON'T KILL BIJOU!!! (Raises 20 hands) Why would you even think about it? Please don't kill her. She is the love of Hamtaro's life! That would be so cruel. I'm sorry if i'm being too critical! You're doing great so far, i'm just trying to help you improve. Ok, as for ideas on the next chapter, you could have Bijou in like a coma or something and have Hamtaro and Boss's characters apologize to each other or something, or have Hamtaro do something incredibly romantic when Bijou wakes up. I say have Hamtaro talk to Boss and make him accept Bijou's love for Hamtaro, then have Hamtaro do something romantic for her when she wakes. Wow, long review. Hope to read soon! Bye! P.S. For future chapters, like later in the story, you should have Hamtaro and Bijou talk about children and make one on them mating and having a child. Just for thought.
| Title: I'm sorry!
Reviewed By: Gatomon [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2004 13:17 CST
Comment/Review:
Ok, ok. I wanted to thank samuraiofsteel and foxfire9. So, as for your reward, I'll write more! And more! And more... -smacks self- Ok, I won't stop writting, so ignore the whole "THE END" thingy! Ja Ne!!! ^^
| Title: Mr.
Reviewed By: samuraiofsteel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2004 22:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I guess I should thank you for mentioning me in the story. I didn\'t know my review meant that much to you....Anyways, I thought I\'d do it again since you liked it so much the first time! First off, AWESOME STORY! I loved the ending. I am a sucker for this couple. Really. It was great how you went all out on the town and restarant and fireworks, all leading up to the kiss. The only thing I see that you could improve is on spelling a little. Other than that, you are a great writer! And yes, I wouldn\'t mind seeing them continue their relationship, to see what else they do. Maybe you could have them go on a romantic afternoon picnic, then Boss sees them or something and Hamtaro and Boss have a fight. Oh No! What will happen? Lol. Just giving you ideas. Btw, you seem like a very nice person. If you have AOL IM my screename is the same : Samuraiof steel. IM me. Great story! A+++! Later.
| Reviewed By: foxfire9 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2004 07:38 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Make hamtaro and bijou kiss!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Yes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Oh, and good job!
| Reviewed By: samuraiofsteel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 21, 2004 13:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love H x B too! Yes, they definately need to kiss like in the next chapter, I say make it as romantic as possible. Let them confess their love and how much and how long they have loved each other. You\\\\\\\'ve done a great job so far, but the suspense is killing me. Well, there\\\\\\\'s my review. Please let me read soon!
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