Reviewed By: Omega_Red9 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 23:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have to write more. The overall flow of the work is interuppted by your lack of style. You simply come out and say what is going on; it is important to realize that the reader will need more than just the facts to get into the story. Try to increase your descriptive vocabulary while not overly describing the situation. I know it is a hard concept to master, but it is important to get under the belt of any writer. Also, try to work on the dialogue of the story. Your characters simply banter, but they are greatly out of character. If you are going to change their personalities so much, then you need to show the reader how they became who they are. I would recommend reading a few other stories and look at how they create a dialogue between characters. It is important not to alienate the reader, and if they are reading a Teen Titans fic then that means that they expect the Teen Titans. If you alter their personalities too much without showing how they became that way then you will scare off your readers. Just a few thoughts. I would appretiate your view on some of my writings, it is always good to see what other writers think about your work. Any comments would be appretiated.
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