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| "Contrast: Blue" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] | Reviewed By: halowing4 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2004 09:24 CDT
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I think the Doom arc was absolutely rivetting and the best story line so far!! Personally I think Amelda's hair is not scarlet but more of a reddish maroon color. However his inability to shoot Seto with Mokuba present was completely in character
| Reviewed By: halowing4 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2004 08:30 CDT
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I totally agree that Jou should be Seme. I think Kaiba's repressed personality and hinted at (in other areas) sexual abuse by his stepfather would make him reluctant to take the lead in a sexual relationship. I'm referring to Animon and Elf's excellant series. I liked the dialog between Mai and Jou and how he described Kaiba: Beautiful like a girl,indeed.
| Reviewed By: halowing4 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2004 22:48 CDT
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Love the direction of this story. Those were some pretty sexy dreams! Would love to see a drawing of Seto in the outfit of Joey's dreams.
| Title: Chapter 6...
Reviewed By: Mayflower [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2004 22:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
They seriously need a rating higher than ten. How does it look when I give all tens? Hmph. I really did think about what I put, in all honesty. But everything came together, so... all tens. So there. Nyah. Okay, the story. I'm just in love with Kaiba dearest. (-senses the impending loss of limbs for that crack-) Jounouchi is delightful, absolutely delightful. I don't even know how to go into it any deeper. It's possibly the most colorful (not intended in a negative way in any way whatsoever) potrayal I've seen of his character. Thumbs up for that. And Kaiba's the same way. But more understated. Which is, I guess, the point. Though he had his moment of discomposure this time around, didn't he? I can't sympathize, but I do feel sorry for him. They seem to be heading toward something, which is exciting of course. (And my insider information has me bouncing a lot too. Less caffeine for May-san, yesyes.) Er, I think that's all I wanted to say for the moment. For the moment, mind. I need to go see if FF.net likes me yet...
| Reviewed By: halowing4 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2004 07:04 CDT
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Excellant chapter. I'd love to see Seto in the leather chaps.Good fight scene. Looking forward to the next chapter.
| Title: Chapter 3...
Reviewed By: Mayflower [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2004 01:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, can I go fangirl on this chapter? Because if so, I just want to say that I love you. And you write well. Yes. This story appeals to so many aspects of my personality that no one ever gets a chance to see. (Yeah, I like writing fight scenes. But I don't do it very often. I'm told it's frightening when I do. Whatever that means.) I'm going to have to feed some of the plot bunnies this story tossed at my head. (Oooh, how good inspiration is.) Right. Where was I? (She's spazzing out again...) Oh, yes, fighting. The physicality that you write with is amazing. Some people stay very much in touch with the emotions of a character, expressing a story through thoughts and reactions. But your writing seems to be the opposite. It takes initative and that is rare. And I like it. So I'm just going to fangirl myself on out of here before I start squealing and acting in a manner totally contridictary to how mature we all know I am. Right?
| Title: Chapter 2...
Reviewed By: Mayflower [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2004 01:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Again, very good chapter. I noticed that the paragraphs and such seemed to take a tilt away from the first chapter, but that's your perogative and not a reason to take off any more than one little point. This was just as enjoyable as the first one. (She says as she tries desperately not to mock poor Jounouchi's luck in any way, shape or form - seeing as that would be cruel. And Mayflower's no crueler than she has to be. Aaand likes the third person.) The dialogue continues to be interesting and engaging. I found a nit, after searching carefully. There's one mispelled word (put in present instead of past tense) and at one point there are two semi-redundent sentences. (Mayflower does this all the time, yes she does. Sometimes she means to, so she shouldn't critisize too harshly.) Having to do with dearest Kaiba-kun's eyes. But that's the worst I can do in the area of picking it apart. There's not much to pick at, seeing as it's so good. And, next chapter...
| Title: Yummy...
Reviewed By: Mayflower [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2004 01:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You're going to put me in the grave early if you keep shocking me like this. You write exceptionally. I have to admit, when you showed me the sample, I thought it was good - but not awesome. I was thinking, 'yes, the description is good and the language is intriguing, but it's not enough to literally knock my socks off'. And now... wow. I'm totally serious, I really adored this. (Adored is such a bad word, but I'm running a little dry on creativity myself.) It's amazing. The dialogue is exceptional, the descriptions are vivid, I could be here all day. I urge you to continue writing, because if you write this well... hey, you could always draw comics right? I think you'd be very good at it. I'm just knocked completely dead by this. I should have read it sooner. (*curses FF.net internally*) I honestly can't come up with anything to make it better. It just fits and flows so well... I don't know, maybe I'm just being stupid, but I really sincerely enjoyed this. (*needs to work on expanding her own limited vocabulary*) I can feel very at ease giving this a 10 out of 10, because it earns it. Thumbs up!
| Reviewed By: Nell (FiNel) On: April 06, 2004 19:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YO! FiNel from DA speaking ^.~ Lets break down the ratings~ Style a 7 because although this is an extremely good fic, there are no metaphors, things that make it 'flow'. That's just my view, eitherway. Spelling a 10... Cause you got grammar down, etc Originality a 9 because I'm used to seeing fighter possibilities :) Though overall it's fairly original. Enjoyment a 10 because I LOVE THIS FIC. When can we see lemons? ;D I wanna see more! And see more soon!!! Email me sometime ;P alaroche@msn.com
| Reviewed By: Li On: March 28, 2004 21:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is purty good so far~ ^.^ I hope you update soon, 'cause I'm enjoying Seto's appearance ^.^ I'm glad you changed the last name, is was kinda dorky.
| Reviewed By: halowing4 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2004 08:02 CST
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Interesting story so far. Love the artwork and I LOVED the little Burst Stream comic. Seto's expression after the burst stream was priceless.
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