| "Loss and Redemption" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: desert_tiger888 On: January 27, 2007 01:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
best fic i've ever read in this site so far..i'm a real keitaro/motoko fan,but i got a little disappointed that it only ended with the words"i'm pregnant"..i'm not saying that i didn't like the ending,don't get me wrong,this fic was awesome.i hope your gonna make a sequel that includes their daughter or son.anyway...GREAT JOB
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Title: One of my favorite stories
Reviewed By: Godslayer [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2007 22:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The 2nd Love Hina fanfiction that I ever read and one of my favorite stories of all time. It was so good that it permanently prejudiced me to favor the motoko/keitaro relationship.
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Reviewed By: monkey-with-wrench On: April 24, 2006 19:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a fantastic fic and I have to say, if you can write nothing else then you can write lemon. But you can write everything else extremely well and the sex wasn't what I was reading this for. I'm rambling and if you can't tell this is supposed to be praise. The only gripe I have is that Motoko was somewhat ooc, I thought she opened up to Keitaro far too quickly, though of course this is subjective and I only realize on thinking back so it never really detracted my enjoyment of the read. Right, now I have to go read some Keitaro/Shinobu fiction because chapter 8 gave me a big need for some.
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Reviewed By: sveta89 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2006 15:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great story
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Reviewed By: Hero Chao On: January 25, 2006 13:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. WOW. That is the first fanfic that I have read the whole way through in a long, long time. I couldn't stop reading it. I hope that you do that sequel (If you haven't already) soon. I think that it would be even more awesome. I'm glad about the choice he made. She's my favorite. ;) Wonderful job.
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Title: thank you
Reviewed By: shadowdragonking666 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2006 22:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it made me cry... i wish the manga/anime was like this... or at least an ova. u have captured all of the the characters perfectly and with astounding detail. i read it all and wish for more...
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Reviewed By: tyler 10 On: September 07, 2005 01:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
IT IS AWESOME enough said
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Reviewed By: Gaikokujin On: November 02, 2004 22:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man, to be honest, I didn't want to stop reading this until I could finish it completely in one sitting (which would prove to be tough) but ended up taking about two days to finish it. I have to say that this was an excellent rendition of the story. Like mentioned before in previous posts, you captured the essence of each of the character at least decently well. I would completely recommend this to any of my friends that have watched the anime or read the manga. I feel that it was refreshing to have this style of drama with the Love Hina story, since the manga was mostly comedy. Can't wait to read your sequel! Good luck and keep writing. Ja ne!
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Reviewed By: LightedPath On: June 17, 2004 23:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it. Plain and simple. I think that I actually liked the way this story went better than the original in the manga. Your writing style is amazing, I felt like I was reading the manga all over. You captured the essence of each of the characters very well. That attention to the details made this fanfic that much more enjoable to read. To be honest, I couldn't stop reading it. In fact, I went to work a bit late because I needed to find out who he picked! Good stuff. The only thing that could use improvement is spelling and grammer. Often times I would be in the middle of a paragraph and need to re-read the last sentence, because a "he" was supposed to be a "she", or there was a word omitted. Nothing major, I could always work out in my head what was supposed to be there, but still... it hurt the flow of the story a bit. Other than that, I can't wait for the sequel!
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Reviewed By: thalian [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2004 19:13 CDT
Comment/Review:
well done... i was wondering why i didnt see it on ffnet anymore hehe... good ending for it that is the way i think the manga shoulda ended hehe. hope ya write a sequal for it...keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Micah Ayanami On: May 06, 2004 01:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, since people seem to be really slack in the review department as of late, I'll lend you some advice. - Writing Style: I like your style, the only problem is, it seems somewhat rushed in parts. Some dialogue is mixed and blocky, and some flows nicely. You have a nice sense of characterization and I couldn't find any problems with your portrayal of Motoko or anyone else, for that matter. - Spelling: I commend your pre-reader and your own grammatical skills. Very impress, as I failed to find any mistakes whatsoever. - Originality: Sure, this idea has been done to death by fanboys/girls like most others, but at least; this one was well-written. You have restored my faith in this Genre of Fanfics and I will be anxious for the next chapter to be released. - Enjoyment: Excellent. I enjoyed this very much, and you are without-a-doubt, a talented author. - Overall: Very refreshing to see some talent floating around still on MM.org, and I urge to you get another chapter out and keep 'em coming. Yours Sincerly, Micah Ayanami (Kursch)
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Reviewed By: jilli-chan On: April 24, 2004 08:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
please make another chapter
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