| "The Right Moves" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
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Reviewed By: Jax-A-Lot On: June 30, 2009 21:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this story because it kept me drawn in until the very end. Their experience seemed more realistic to me than most stories I've read. However, I think that the story would flow better if it weren't so choppy. Transitions between the scenes could be a bit more streamlined. I often had to backtrack to figure out whether or not I missed something between paragraphs. Overall, it was highly enjoyable. :D
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Reviewed By: charfan4evr On: June 12, 2009 23:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story really needs more attention than this. Only 13 reviews?! Anyway, this fic was exactly what I was looking for after I finished the manga. I also read your horror story version. I liked Hikaru's confession about Sai's ghost, and with that and this story together, I'm completely satisfied with the Akira/Hikaru pairing. Thank you so much for writing and posting this up.
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Reviewed By: Trekiael On: July 03, 2007 11:13 CDT
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Awsome, just completly wasome, the last sentence killed me! The way you realated this seduction to go, the way Hikaru retilated but admited to loose, the autanticity of the sex, the denied attraction, the way they're completly in character: Akira leading but in his unsure way and Hikaru takes it in stride but energically and not just cute and submissive, and I'm not only talking about the sex himself, the way they're still always fighting, everything, simply perfect. The best hikaru no go story I've read so far. Awsome job!!
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Reviewed By: justkat [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2005 07:26 CST
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Fabulous. I enjoyed this very much. Loved the way that Shindou thought that he was in control, while, really, Touya had him right where he wanted him the whole time. ..."Uneasy!?...I'll show you uneasy, you bastard! Get down here!"... He he! How to manipulate Shindou! Very engaging characters, that one would like to see more of, while still in character, to my mind. And *such* a nicely done lemon. I totally disagree that it was too short, or, lacking in any other way. A great story. Thanks so much for sharing!^_^
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Reviewed By: hostilecrayon [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2005 20:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very very good. I loved the build-up, but I think the sex was too short for as much build up as you had. It would have been nice to see some oral play as well. But all in all, it was very well written and very very funny. Seriously, you're hillarious. Keep writing. =)
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Title: omg
Reviewed By: Lil'wystynyra On: May 21, 2005 09:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!! *is a total yaoi fangirl right now* Omg, you have to write the bathroom thing o.0 PLEASE!
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Title: PERFECTION WITH ICING ON TOP!
Reviewed By: IstariKitsunelover [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2005 19:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Amazing!!! AMAZING!! THat is the most incredible fic ever!! I though I was going to die in happieness about a million times. How can something like that be so GOOOOD? Kudos to you, my friend.
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Reviewed By: K. K. ( Not putting my real sn... ) On: March 13, 2005 14:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was great! So cute, and you managed to stay in character! I loved the last line about the bathroom. Nice comic releif after the serious part of the story. Still.... dont ruin it by making a Bathroom sequal. Alot of authors do that, but the sequeal is never quite as good, and it kinda kills the story..... Readerts are probably gonna kill me for that, hence why I didnt use my real sn. lol. ^^
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Reviewed By: Shousetsuka [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2004 00:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
A wonderful read. Slightly predictable, but still fun. Writing from Shindou's perspective made things more interesting. Well developed with a distinctive beginning and end. Good job!
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Reviewed By: samurai-ashes [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2004 17:56 CDT
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what an absolutely perfect last night. XD I get a kick out of Hikaru running around thinking about being molested in the bathroom. I liked Akira's answer to the marriage question too; very prettyful, how that all came together. And dude. Hot smut. You rock. ^____^v
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Reviewed By: Pixie Smith [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2004 18:09 CDT
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Ha, ha, ha! Humorous and lovely. This is one of the first Hikaru fics that I read that I absolutely adored. I was just drooling the whole way through. My most memorable moment was when Akira was reaching for Hikaru's hand and he was panicking and then later sad that Akira only wanted his hand LOL! You're the best!
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Reviewed By: ladyflame [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2004 18:26 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Wow, that was hot!! I'd really like to read a sequel to this fic, write the bathroom scene, more interaction with his friends, etc.
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Reviewed By: joycejanik [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2004 05:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like this fic! its the first Hikaru no go fic i've read and im happy that its so well written! characterization is great!!
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Reviewed By: Dragonflie On: April 10, 2004 23:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I got to read this bit by bit, but I'm glad I waited to read the end, 'cause it rocked. ^^ The whole THING was perfect, but you heard what I had to say on most of it- still so very funny and cute, by the by. But I have to mention that I adored how Hikaru threatened Akira's life. *dies* This is just great. ^____^
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Title: Way to Go! {No pun intended!}
Reviewed By: FireKali [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2004 03:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
^-^; Yeah, that title was corny, but it's true! This is the first fic for this series I've ever seen and I have to tell you, it was great! I hope you write more "Go" fics, Aprael! Keep up the awesome work! FireKali
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