| "Coitus" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] |
Reviewed By: Silver Fox [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2004 20:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting. I'm waiting to see more. It's nice to see diversity amongst writers. You are the oldest writer I have read things from and you have written some of the more intersting stories. It's cool that you like anime. It's an excellent genre to get into. I look forward to reading more of this story and your other fics. Please, don't stop writing. I like reading things not quite so dark and angsty like the things I typically write. It just commits more to my interests and likes. Thanks for the story. Ratings SoW: 10 - I like the style. That's normally what I look for in a fic, besides the flow and the enjoyment factor. S&G: Just a suggestion. You might want to capitalize when things are in quotation marks. Sorry, the grammar stuff is stuck in my head from living in Wisconsin and having it drilled in my head. O/C: Not bad at all. I like. EF: Like I said, it was an interesting story. Aya is always so cold and depressed. It's good to see him lighten up. OR: I kind of based it the above ratings. Just a few minor improvements that every story, including great works of lit. and my stuff, need some. I love the story. Continue. I don't normally do ratings. I hope I didn't offend you. :)
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Reviewed By: Mikkeneko On: May 02, 2004 22:58 CDT
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I'm very glad to see you're still writing, and look forward to more of this. :)
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Reviewed By: screaming shadows On: April 26, 2004 17:15 CDT
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Beautifully written... I have to say I was a bit sceptical when i read the summary, I wouldn't have thought someone could pull it off... (sigh) yet I believe I have been proven wrong, for not only are you creating a love afair between all three but you've managed not to make one less than the others... I can't wait for the rest.
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Reviewed By: Aemon 1 On: April 19, 2004 10:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Damn, what can I say? This is one of the best fanfictions about WK I've ever read. Every chapter leaves you hanging on the edge of your seat aned I like that! Please post your next chapet soon, it's just not right to leave all of us readers waiting for too long!!
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Reviewed By: Starshadow [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2004 10:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wah! Evil cliffhanger! But I'm glad I finally got to read these chapters, and can't wait for the next ones. It might be just me, but the description of that truck's passenger sets off a little bell in my head. ^___^
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Reviewed By: Cole'sLover On: April 17, 2004 14:41 CDT
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Wow,I didn't know you had written fanfics for this anime series! I've read ALL of your stories that I could find for Saiyuki. You are one of my all time favorite authors. PLEASE keep up the excellent work. Your writing style gives so much depth to the characters and brings them to life. Oh, by the way, post another chapter soon, please?
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Reviewed By: sub_o On: April 16, 2004 05:18 CDT
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i love it!! (just like how I also loved "interruptus") heheh I liked how Aya got all protective... cuute~ and are we going to know who the crazy driver was? or is he just some random person? anyway can't wait to see what's happening next~!
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Title: Coitus chapter 3
Reviewed By: Skippyscatt On: April 15, 2004 19:45 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh man poor Aya caught in the kitchen in his comfies with Ken and Yohji. Aaaaand trapped between them! God the poor bish doesn't have a chance they will have him totally seduced and begging before they even get to the bedroom! LOL I know the real angst is coming but I know that it will be okay too. I can't wait for the rest! Thank you so much Dearest E-sama. ~Hugs Da Llama tightly loving her gift fic~
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Title: Coitus Chapter 2
Reviewed By: Skippyscatt On: April 15, 2004 19:39 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my god that was Farf wasn't it??? Man I'm sooooo glad that Yohji's car didn't get creamed! But I'm even more glad that the boys didn't get creamed. And it would be just like Yohji too to be all macho and not want to admit that he was hurt bad enough to worry about. How will that work with the boys getting to play tonight though?? And I so love that Ken and Aya are doing the fussing thing! Because you know that Aya would let Ken do all the fussing if he didn't actually care. The boy is soooo caught! hehehe
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Reviewed By: Sky Rat [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2004 19:46 CDT
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Oh, what a painful place to stop! Very curious to find out what happened to aya in the past.... great job with the character interactions. I'm curious to hear more about Omi too. Are you going to shed anymore light on him and his 'secret friend'? I'd really like to read more about them as well as the main plot. btw, I like your SN.
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Title: Coitus 1/5
Reviewed By: Skippyscatt On: April 13, 2004 06:10 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hate the rating system because it's a cold method of telling an author anything. Anyway I already know that things like spelling and grammar will be perfect. And you already know that I love your style of writing it's what keeps me reading for twenty-four hours because I keep telling myself... "Just one more chapter..." until they are all gone and I'm left pining for more. Originality... you have it in spades. You can take a idea that has been used a hundred times and put a spin on it that makes it new and uniquely your own. And the enjoyment factor well my comments on that are coming in just a moment. Ahhh Good way to start them getting the idea that they work well together as a threesome! With Omi out and the three oldest manning the physical side of the mission... Excellent! I love that word... milquetoast, it creates the perfect image of this limp, mostly unappealing man, that most of us wouldn't give a second glance to. Hah! Those Detective skills come in handy for aaalll kinds of missions, eh Yohji? hehehe Oooh do we get to find out what kind of evidence Yohji discovered? ~smacks self and tries to pick brain out of gutter.~ LOL Looks like Yohji's stuck with me in the gutter. LOL The fact that he's already possessive about Aya is wonderful, but I'm glad also that he and Ken expect Aya to want them both or not at all. It shows how strong their relationship is. "Did you really think you could escape the scales of justice forever, murderous scum?" I love this line! It's so Weiss! And only Aya could actually pull it off with that dark voice and those eyes just boring through you. Ouch! Poor Yohji! I have often wondered how many times he's been cut as sharp as that wire is. He makes it seem so effortless but you know there are times that it's gone through those gloves. LOL Omi appealing to Yohji's vanity and ego to get him to agree to the plan? hehehe And then Ken deflating it the way only a lover can. LOL Only Kenken or Omi could get away with a move like that for Aya and I suspect even Omi wouldn't have as much luck as Kenken! Excellent chapter! I'm sorry my review got so long! Hugs! Cat
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