| "Plotting to Win" Reviews/Comments [ 13 ] |
Title: interesting
Reviewed By: Mirena [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2007 20:47 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like your take on Bra, I think she is the most overlooked character in the series and hey she has the same heritage as the Goten, Gohan and Trunks.
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Title: I like!
Reviewed By: MizuSasuke [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2007 00:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like! I like a lot! I'm not really into romance fics, but this one has something... It makes me feel all cuddly inside! LOL. It was really intertaining to read, I like how you've kept everyone in character, especially during conversations (aka: good dialogue!) it was very funny! L0L, update ok?
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Reviewed By: Le Noir de Adhara On: March 18, 2007 12:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gah. Soo good! I love the characters, the plot, everything! (Hence the high ratings!) Anyway. I have a request to make: more!!!!!! I LOVE this fic! Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: Adela 4 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2006 18:39 CST
Comment/Review:
Nice update soon
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Title: Chapter 2 ffrg
Reviewed By: Sidhe On: November 24, 2005 11:57 CST
Comment/Review:
Well Lark, it may not make sense, but this chapter draws me in anyway. Trying to find something that I can help you 'improve' on is hard, so it's not like I'm going to nitpick. You've got an excellent flow and good description. One of the only things I could wish or want for is that there 'were' description of what had been going on in earlier chapters, just because if you're not a regular updater, it's a bit of a pain for some people to go back and read things, it used to make me mad when I was younger. There are also some problems with names. When most people look at someone upon greeting them, their names are said once, or usually not at all in my experience. Overall you've got a good story. (I don't even like DragonballGT and I was drawn to that) Keep it up dear. ^^
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Title: FFRG Review
Reviewed By: futekioosha [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 16:33 CDT
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Thank you for submitting your work to FFRG. The first chapter of this story was very solidly written lacking any glaringly noticeable grammar or spelling mistakes that would distract from the story. The flow of the chapter was very fluid pulling me into the tale, and keeping me there, ready to read the next chapter to find out what happens next. The written dialogue was comfortable and easy to follow, as well as humorous. The only question I have about the chapter or set up of the fic is what is won in the outcome of the bet? Is it just the satisfaction of winning? With or with out that question being answered I would still consider the beginning of this tale a wonderful start to a very promising story, only made promising by the level of skill you've portrayed in introducing your characters and moving the storyline along with your talents. You've taken a classic plot device and have begun to make an entertaining read of it. Good luck with this tale. ~futekioosha~
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Title: title
Reviewed By: utanbisaya On: February 11, 2005 07:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey! please update! please update! please update! i really love your fic!
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Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2005 13:34 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Smart fic thus far! Even for one such as I, who doesn't follow Dragonballs, I am really enjoying the story and can't wait to hear more. The dialogue absolutely shines, the characters seem down to earth and real, flaws and all. Great job, can't wait to read more!!
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Reviewed By: Random Person. On: September 07, 2004 11:39 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Haha!! Great fic! I agree with you that GT was full of crap compared to DBZ. And I hate it when they make Bra into an air-head! I really like your Bra better. (wow, that sentence sounded weird) Anyway, love the story and the Goten + Bra couple!
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Reviewed By: Sinu-Yasha [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2004 19:47 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this fic is awesome, update soon
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Reviewed By: Ember [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2004 03:33 CDT
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You have the beginning of a very nice fanfic here. The conversations were very well placed and the descriptions around them were enough to make the scenes come alive, whilst not becoming bogged down with detail. I look forward to seeing where this story goes from here.
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Title: Good
Reviewed By: HotsummerYami [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2004 17:40 CDT
Comment/Review:
Good Good Good. Please update!
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Reviewed By: PiccoloLover#? On: April 16, 2004 10:59 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Haha -- clever! I like it! (Very original, to say the least...) Keep at it, and write quickly!!!
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