Reviewed By: The Lioncourt [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2004 00:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
It started good but you're true, the lemon is rather bad, but it has a good point: once you continue the story, you can add more lemmons, each other better than the one before it ;). A question: Why the hell did you make Shido SO STUPID? I beg you to give a reason in the story that explains Shido's way of acting (and don't make Kain spell him, that's rather used). Good luck witht the rest of your fanfiction.
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