Reviewed By: fallenangel7583 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2004 20:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
you have a great story idea here, its wonderful actually. you have such great lines and character motivations. its really good, i am impressed. heres the constructive critisim... within all of the dialogue, add in some character motions. you have the workings nearly of a play. dialogue is great but i was lost at points as to who was talking or what they were doing. some of your chapters are great with dialogue and description. don't rush the story along, take yoru time and enjoy it. great job adn keep it up.
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